Read my script?
This is a script I wrote called "Trash." Not because it's bad. It's actually pretty good.
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This is a script I wrote called "Trash." Not because it's bad. It's actually pretty good.
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Aside from very minor grammatical errors (which I'm certain you'll pick up on) I think it's very good! I thoroughly enjoyed reading this, and I imagine you had just as much a time writing it. It's eerily atmospheric, and does make you think and yearn for more. A very great read,, thank you!
Yeah I've actually taken some of those mistakes out. I'll have to upload that version later.
Wow, no one ever has described my writing like that before. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Yeah, no worries!! You take your time.
Very much so!! It's refreshing to see people so willing to share their writing with others. Well done to you, though. I understand the difficulty in doing so. Major respect.
Eh..it wasn't difficult honestly. I've been sharing my writing and art online for a while now. It's a lot easier than it used to be.
I'm glad it's become a lot easier for you. It's an amazing achievement, honestly.
I guess it is. What makes you say that?
I'm just trying to get my work out there.
A lot of people really do struggle with that sort of stuff. In a sense it kind of gives hope to those more socially inept at putting forth their own creations for the world to see. It's cool that you can do that, though!
Yeah some people do struggle with that true.
I gotta put my stuff out there because I'm trying to make games and stuff too.
That's pretty neat. Keep doing what you're doing, and good luck!
Thanks I will!
Not bad. Pretty eerie and straight to the point. If you ever decide to film this, I'd recommend cutting some of the dialogue during the creepy scenes. It may seem necessary while writing, but if there's anything I've learned from filmmaking, it's that actions can definitely speak louder than words. Sometimes the emotion of the scene is all you need.
Hmm I hadn't thought of that, but I'll keep in mind.
It's not bad. There are a few grammatical errors like elricily said and a couple parts that don't really make sense.
So Shaun and Austin attack the green dude with frying pans, and when they realise it isn't working they somehow teleport away to do the other plan. Also despite the green dude being able to kill Jeff with one fell swoop he seems to have a hard time fighting back against Shaun and Jeff.
Yeah I should've written that go somewhere else when making the next plan. Someone on another forum pointed that out.
I actually don't have any excuse for why it's for the green guy to fight them. I honestly didn't think about it. Thanks for bringing it up.