Jenna
Her heart was beating furiously in her chest as Jenna was walking down the hallway of the castle. Next to her walked the new captai… moren of the guard, Nora. Just watching her made Jenna a bit uncomfortable. Nora was all the things Jenna wasn't, strong, beautiful, confident. But the way she looked at her, the way everyone looked at her, bothered Jenna a lot. A mixture of shock and pity. Jenna wanted no pity. She wanted to see the man who attacked her dead. Not only Wolfius, but also the one behind him, the one who sent him to Raylansfair and ordered him to kill her and Lady Halla. And to achieve this, she needed the help of a man whom she once deemed as the worst monster possible, before she met Wolfius. She needed the help of Harris Flowers.
Nora stopped in front of the door that lead to Lord Harris audience room. She hadn't talked much to Jenna, only saying the necessary things, almost as if she was uncomfortable talking to her. But … [view original content]
Jenna
Her heart was beating furiously in her chest as Jenna was walking down the hallway of the castle. Next to her walked the new captai… moren of the guard, Nora. Just watching her made Jenna a bit uncomfortable. Nora was all the things Jenna wasn't, strong, beautiful, confident. But the way she looked at her, the way everyone looked at her, bothered Jenna a lot. A mixture of shock and pity. Jenna wanted no pity. She wanted to see the man who attacked her dead. Not only Wolfius, but also the one behind him, the one who sent him to Raylansfair and ordered him to kill her and Lady Halla. And to achieve this, she needed the help of a man whom she once deemed as the worst monster possible, before she met Wolfius. She needed the help of Harris Flowers.
Nora stopped in front of the door that lead to Lord Harris audience room. She hadn't talked much to Jenna, only saying the necessary things, almost as if she was uncomfortable talking to her. But … [view original content]
I'm not sure if you're joking or not, but I'm studying the grammar english and maybe I'll be able to take my master’s degree, english isn't my native language, so there is a lot to learn. I'm hoping that your grammar is better than mine, lots of people don't pay too much attention to the words. Apparently, you'd to be smarter than me, so if I'm wrong in any instance you can, pretty much please, correct me.
http://www.oxforddictionaries.com/words/its-or-it-s
"its" and "it’s" are confusables for many of us, without an apostrophe means (is belonging to it), "butt's as many you don't have", with an apostrophe means (it is or it has)
I'm just messing with you, I know that it can be hard learning the English language if you're not a native speaker, I'm not a native speaker myself, far from it.
I know the difference between it's and its, you don't have to explain me it. I guess your words are smarter now, aaAAAaaaaAAAAAA :P
I'm not sure if you're joking or not, but I'm studying the grammar english and maybe I'll be able to take my master’s degree, english isn't … moremy native language, so there is a lot to learn. I'm hoping that your grammar is better than mine, lots of people don't pay too much attention to the words. Apparently, you'd to be smarter than me, so if I'm wrong in any instance you can, pretty much please, correct me.
http://www.oxforddictionaries.com/words/its-or-it-s
"its" and "it’s" are confusables for many of us, without an apostrophe means (is belonging to it), "butt's as many you don't have", with an apostrophe means (it is or it has)
Whose words are the smarter now, aaAAAaaaaAAAAAA.
I'm just messing with you, I know that it can be hard learning the English language if you're not a native speaker, I'm not a native speaker… more myself, far from it.
I know the difference between it's and its, you don't have to explain me it. I guess your words are smarter now, aaAAAaaaaAAAAAA :P
Good luck learning English though, you can do it.
Well, my friends, this is a somewhat special occasion. Take a closer look at which part of the forum we're currently located in...
Yes, y… morees, you see right
Thanks to a certain person who is blind, yet somehow still the best sniper this forum has ever seen, this story got moved back to its old home in the General Discussion. This is amazing and I am very grateful for this. Keep in mind, this might not be a permanent change, but for now it's here and that's awesome.
On another note, I probably won't manage to finish the next part until tomorrow, as I'm going to bed early and have to leave early tomorrow. I am making good progress with the writing though. It's going to be a Samantha part and it's definitely coming out on Sunday, which will also mark the date where I will close the voting. In the unlikely case that I won't have internet during my vacation, see you around in a few days
Jenna
Her heart was beating furiously in her chest as Jenna was walking down the hallway of the castle. Next to her walked the new captai… moren of the guard, Nora. Just watching her made Jenna a bit uncomfortable. Nora was all the things Jenna wasn't, strong, beautiful, confident. But the way she looked at her, the way everyone looked at her, bothered Jenna a lot. A mixture of shock and pity. Jenna wanted no pity. She wanted to see the man who attacked her dead. Not only Wolfius, but also the one behind him, the one who sent him to Raylansfair and ordered him to kill her and Lady Halla. And to achieve this, she needed the help of a man whom she once deemed as the worst monster possible, before she met Wolfius. She needed the help of Harris Flowers.
Nora stopped in front of the door that lead to Lord Harris audience room. She hadn't talked much to Jenna, only saying the necessary things, almost as if she was uncomfortable talking to her. But … [view original content]
I'm not sure if you're joking or not, but I'm studying the grammar english and maybe I'll be able to take my master’s degree, english isn't … moremy native language, so there is a lot to learn. I'm hoping that your grammar is better than mine, lots of people don't pay too much attention to the words. Apparently, you'd to be smarter than me, so if I'm wrong in any instance you can, pretty much please, correct me.
http://www.oxforddictionaries.com/words/its-or-it-s
"its" and "it’s" are confusables for many of us, without an apostrophe means (is belonging to it), "butt's as many you don't have", with an apostrophe means (it is or it has)
Whose words are the smarter now, aaAAAaaaaAAAAAA.
Jenna
Her heart was beating furiously in her chest as Jenna was walking down the hallway of the castle. Next to her walked the new captai… moren of the guard, Nora. Just watching her made Jenna a bit uncomfortable. Nora was all the things Jenna wasn't, strong, beautiful, confident. But the way she looked at her, the way everyone looked at her, bothered Jenna a lot. A mixture of shock and pity. Jenna wanted no pity. She wanted to see the man who attacked her dead. Not only Wolfius, but also the one behind him, the one who sent him to Raylansfair and ordered him to kill her and Lady Halla. And to achieve this, she needed the help of a man whom she once deemed as the worst monster possible, before she met Wolfius. She needed the help of Harris Flowers.
Nora stopped in front of the door that lead to Lord Harris audience room. She hadn't talked much to Jenna, only saying the necessary things, almost as if she was uncomfortable talking to her. But … [view original content]
Thanks a lot for submitting! And yes, Essos is among the places I'm looking forward to write about the most. While it's still some time until part of the story moves there, I already have a few very interesting characters for it, as well as a few exciting storylines planned.
Death to the Harkings!
I must admit, I kinda regret telling Corbin about Harris. At first I was all against Harris but now I … moream seeing he was kinda right about all this.
Yes, that was intentional. Jenna is definitely regretting it too that she told Corbin about Harris. By the way, I can confirm that the content of the letter was mainly responsible for the attack on Jenna and Halla, since the letter ended up with Mullendore as you know. The sole question that remains is, has it been an accident, or was Corbin deliberately sending the information to Mullendore instead of sending it to the High Septon?
And Harris has good reasons to act like he does. He might not be right with all of his views, but he has good reasons for many of his more questionable actions. In the end, his unarguably good intentions are the main reason why Jenna sees him as better than Wolfius or other people, perhaps even as the best choice Raylansf… [view original content]
Jenna
Her heart was beating furiously in her chest as Jenna was walking down the hallway of the castle. Next to her walked the new captai… moren of the guard, Nora. Just watching her made Jenna a bit uncomfortable. Nora was all the things Jenna wasn't, strong, beautiful, confident. But the way she looked at her, the way everyone looked at her, bothered Jenna a lot. A mixture of shock and pity. Jenna wanted no pity. She wanted to see the man who attacked her dead. Not only Wolfius, but also the one behind him, the one who sent him to Raylansfair and ordered him to kill her and Lady Halla. And to achieve this, she needed the help of a man whom she once deemed as the worst monster possible, before she met Wolfius. She needed the help of Harris Flowers.
Nora stopped in front of the door that lead to Lord Harris audience room. She hadn't talked much to Jenna, only saying the necessary things, almost as if she was uncomfortable talking to her. But … [view original content]
i've just discovered you and i am really excited with what i see. I am "swallowing now" first book, and already submitted my own character, keeping hopes i will read about her (yess, it's her :-D) in the future!
Jenna
Her heart was beating furiously in her chest as Jenna was walking down the hallway of the castle. Next to her walked the new captai… moren of the guard, Nora. Just watching her made Jenna a bit uncomfortable. Nora was all the things Jenna wasn't, strong, beautiful, confident. But the way she looked at her, the way everyone looked at her, bothered Jenna a lot. A mixture of shock and pity. Jenna wanted no pity. She wanted to see the man who attacked her dead. Not only Wolfius, but also the one behind him, the one who sent him to Raylansfair and ordered him to kill her and Lady Halla. And to achieve this, she needed the help of a man whom she once deemed as the worst monster possible, before she met Wolfius. She needed the help of Harris Flowers.
Nora stopped in front of the door that lead to Lord Harris audience room. She hadn't talked much to Jenna, only saying the necessary things, almost as if she was uncomfortable talking to her. But … [view original content]
Hi guys,
i've just discovered you and i am really excited with what i see. I am "swallowing now" first book, and already submitted my own character, keeping hopes i will read about her (yess, it's her :-D) in the future!
Yaaaay!
I'm glad that you like the story and that you decided to submit a character! I'm sure that I will find a nice role for her soon.
Since I'm currently limited to use my phone until tomorrow, I can't read everything you've written until I'm back home tomorrow evening (since checking google documents correctly is nearly impossible on my phone), but I really like what I have read so far. I'll write you a message as soon as I figured out when I can introduce your character!
Hi guys,
i've just discovered you and i am really excited with what i see. I am "swallowing now" first book, and already submitted my own character, keeping hopes i will read about her (yess, it's her :-D) in the future!
Yaaaay!
Okay... I am confused by this, but I'm just going to assume you meant it as a compliment. I guess you meant it in a positive way, yes? If not, would you care to explain further? I appreciate negative criticism just as much as I appreciate positive criticism.
I also see that you have just joined the forum yesterday. Welcome here! I am Liquid and I am the writer of this story, it's nice to meet you.
Okay... I am confused by this, but I'm just going to assume you meant it as a compliment. I guess you meant it in a positive way, yes? If no… moret, would you care to explain further? I appreciate negative criticism just as much as I appreciate positive criticism.
I also see that you have just joined the forum yesterday. Welcome here! I am Liquid and I am the writer of this story, it's nice to meet you.
Dude, no one asked you to come here. So if you want to be a little bitch about it then do us all a favor and get the hell out. Liquid has excelled as a writer on this forum and you have no right to be instigating any trouble here. You literally came out of nowhere and started making trouble. So either calm yourself or fuck off.
Ah, I see you're one of these people. I'm at least glad that you haven't disappointed my expectations. While I guess I won't see you around the forums for long, I wish you a lot of fun while it lasts.
And now do me a favour and gtfo. With all due respect of course.
That sounds really great, did not expect actually that it will take your attention... also i am glad that it was readeable, because my English grammar is, oh well... better not to comment on it. :-)
My phone have troubles too, it's also so annoying to read on such small screen, so i understand you totally.
Anyway, thank you, Liquid, looking forward to hear from you! :-)
Hi and welcome to the forum
I'm glad that you like the story and that you decided to submit a character! I'm sure that I will find a nic… moree role for her soon.
Since I'm currently limited to use my phone until tomorrow, I can't read everything you've written until I'm back home tomorrow evening (since checking google documents correctly is nearly impossible on my phone), but I really like what I have read so far. I'll write you a message as soon as I figured out when I can introduce your character!
Hi guys,
i've just discovered you and i am really excited with what i see. I am "swallowing now" first book, and already submitted my own character, keeping hopes i will read about her (yess, it's her :-D) in the future!
Yaaaay!
I'm seeing that you're paying attention to the words, but I don't know how much you understand from them. I'm sorry if I offended you by explaining the meaning and the difference between them, no pun intended. The words can't be smart, the people behind them are, words are just thoughts which people express them.
@TDMshadowCP Do you really think I need to prove myself or to anyone else that I'm smarter, if I won't be able to take my master then so be it! Enjoy what you have rather than be what you aren't.
"Education is the kindling of a flame, not the filling of a vessel." - Socrates
God bless you.
@ualexen92 How dare you to define me! It was a stiff joke, stiff humour, even if I'm joking there will be always something to learn from it, I hope.
I'm just messing with you, I know that it can be hard learning the English language if you're not a native speaker, I'm not a native speaker… more myself, far from it.
I know the difference between it's and its, you don't have to explain me it. I guess your words are smarter now, aaAAAaaaaAAAAAA :P
Good luck learning English though, you can do it.
I'm seeing that you're paying attention to the words, but I don't know how much you understand from them. I'm sorry if I offended you by exp… morelaining the meaning and the difference between them, no pun intended. The words can't be smart, the people behind them are, words are just thoughts which people express them.
@TDMshadowCP Do you really think I need to prove myself or to anyone else that I'm smarter, if I won't be able to take my master then so be it! Enjoy what you have rather than be what you aren't.
"Education is the kindling of a flame, not the filling of a vessel." - Socrates
God bless you.
@ualexen92 How dare you to define me! It was a stiff joke, stiff humour, even if I'm joking there will be always something to learn from it, I hope.
Overall I'm the one that's messing.
I'm seeing that you're paying attention to the words, but I don't know how much you understand from them. I'm sorry if I offended you by exp… morelaining the meaning and the difference between them, no pun intended. The words can't be smart, the people behind them are, words are just thoughts which people express them.
@TDMshadowCP Do you really think I need to prove myself or to anyone else that I'm smarter, if I won't be able to take my master then so be it! Enjoy what you have rather than be what you aren't.
"Education is the kindling of a flame, not the filling of a vessel." - Socrates
God bless you.
@ualexen92 How dare you to define me! It was a stiff joke, stiff humour, even if I'm joking there will be always something to learn from it, I hope.
Overall I'm the one that's messing.
Jenna
Her heart was beating furiously in her chest as Jenna was walking down the hallway of the castle. Next to her walked the new captai… moren of the guard, Nora. Just watching her made Jenna a bit uncomfortable. Nora was all the things Jenna wasn't, strong, beautiful, confident. But the way she looked at her, the way everyone looked at her, bothered Jenna a lot. A mixture of shock and pity. Jenna wanted no pity. She wanted to see the man who attacked her dead. Not only Wolfius, but also the one behind him, the one who sent him to Raylansfair and ordered him to kill her and Lady Halla. And to achieve this, she needed the help of a man whom she once deemed as the worst monster possible, before she met Wolfius. She needed the help of Harris Flowers.
Nora stopped in front of the door that lead to Lord Harris audience room. She hadn't talked much to Jenna, only saying the necessary things, almost as if she was uncomfortable talking to her. But … [view original content]
Jenna
Her heart was beating furiously in her chest as Jenna was walking down the hallway of the castle. Next to her walked the new captai… moren of the guard, Nora. Just watching her made Jenna a bit uncomfortable. Nora was all the things Jenna wasn't, strong, beautiful, confident. But the way she looked at her, the way everyone looked at her, bothered Jenna a lot. A mixture of shock and pity. Jenna wanted no pity. She wanted to see the man who attacked her dead. Not only Wolfius, but also the one behind him, the one who sent him to Raylansfair and ordered him to kill her and Lady Halla. And to achieve this, she needed the help of a man whom she once deemed as the worst monster possible, before she met Wolfius. She needed the help of Harris Flowers.
Nora stopped in front of the door that lead to Lord Harris audience room. She hadn't talked much to Jenna, only saying the necessary things, almost as if she was uncomfortable talking to her. But … [view original content]
Jenna
Her heart was beating furiously in her chest as Jenna was walking down the hallway of the castle. Next to her walked the new captai… moren of the guard, Nora. Just watching her made Jenna a bit uncomfortable. Nora was all the things Jenna wasn't, strong, beautiful, confident. But the way she looked at her, the way everyone looked at her, bothered Jenna a lot. A mixture of shock and pity. Jenna wanted no pity. She wanted to see the man who attacked her dead. Not only Wolfius, but also the one behind him, the one who sent him to Raylansfair and ordered him to kill her and Lady Halla. And to achieve this, she needed the help of a man whom she once deemed as the worst monster possible, before she met Wolfius. She needed the help of Harris Flowers.
Nora stopped in front of the door that lead to Lord Harris audience room. She hadn't talked much to Jenna, only saying the necessary things, almost as if she was uncomfortable talking to her. But … [view original content]
Jenna
Her heart was beating furiously in her chest as Jenna was walking down the hallway of the castle. Next to her walked the new captai… moren of the guard, Nora. Just watching her made Jenna a bit uncomfortable. Nora was all the things Jenna wasn't, strong, beautiful, confident. But the way she looked at her, the way everyone looked at her, bothered Jenna a lot. A mixture of shock and pity. Jenna wanted no pity. She wanted to see the man who attacked her dead. Not only Wolfius, but also the one behind him, the one who sent him to Raylansfair and ordered him to kill her and Lady Halla. And to achieve this, she needed the help of a man whom she once deemed as the worst monster possible, before she met Wolfius. She needed the help of Harris Flowers.
Nora stopped in front of the door that lead to Lord Harris audience room. She hadn't talked much to Jenna, only saying the necessary things, almost as if she was uncomfortable talking to her. But … [view original content]
I recently found this after returning to the forums.I will need to get caught up but I already submitted a character that I hope you will like.
I realised that maybe the appearance I gave might not be detailed enough.If there are any details you want expanded on just PM me and I will give you them.
Thanks a lot for submitting! And yes, Essos is among the places I'm looking forward to write about the most. While it's still some time unti… morel part of the story moves there, I already have a few very interesting characters for it, as well as a few exciting storylines planned.
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[Confront Septon Corbin alone]
[Confront Septon Corbin alone]
I sincerely hope Jenna will be okay.
[Confront Septon Corbin alone]
I'm not sure if you're joking or not, but I'm studying the grammar english and maybe I'll be able to take my master’s degree, english isn't my native language, so there is a lot to learn. I'm hoping that your grammar is better than mine, lots of people don't pay too much attention to the words. Apparently, you'd to be smarter than me, so if I'm wrong in any instance you can, pretty much please, correct me.
http://www.oxforddictionaries.com/words/its-or-it-s
"its" and "it’s" are confusables for many of us, without an apostrophe means (is belonging to it), "butt's as many you don't have", with an apostrophe means (it is or it has)
Whose words are the smarter now, aaAAAaaaaAAAAAA.
[Confront Septon Corbin, but take a guard with you]
Submitted my character by the way, hope you can do anything with it.
I'm just messing with you, I know that it can be hard learning the English language if you're not a native speaker, I'm not a native speaker myself, far from it.
I know the difference between it's and its, you don't have to explain me it. I guess your words are smarter now, aaAAAaaaaAAAAAA :P
Good luck learning English though, you can do it.
@Luthor_92Light You can do it, Luthor. God bless you all.
Congrats Liquid
Im happy for you bro
[Confront Septon Corbin alone]
Great part!
[Confront Septon Corbin, but take a guard with you]
I submitted my character, can't wait until you start writing about Essos
This was kind of rude.
[Confront Septon Corbin alone]
Thanks a lot for submitting! And yes, Essos is among the places I'm looking forward to write about the most. While it's still some time until part of the story moves there, I already have a few very interesting characters for it, as well as a few exciting storylines planned.
Confront Septon Corbin, but take a guard with you]
[Confront Septon Corbin alone]
Hi guys,
i've just discovered you and i am really excited with what i see. I am "swallowing now" first book, and already submitted my own character, keeping hopes i will read about her (yess, it's her :-D) in the future!
Yaaaay!
[Confront Septon Corbin alone] Glad to see the story back where it belongs!
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Welcome
you'll love the story
Gay is not a synonym for shitty.
i didnt say it was shitty, good to know you think this is.
Oh look you twisted my words. How damn original.
What did you mean then? I don't see how this is gay in any way shape or form.
Hi and welcome to the forum
I'm glad that you like the story and that you decided to submit a character! I'm sure that I will find a nice role for her soon.
Since I'm currently limited to use my phone until tomorrow, I can't read everything you've written until I'm back home tomorrow evening (since checking google documents correctly is nearly impossible on my phone), but I really like what I have read so far. I'll write you a message as soon as I figured out when I can introduce your character!
Okay... I am confused by this, but I'm just going to assume you meant it as a compliment. I guess you meant it in a positive way, yes? If not, would you care to explain further? I appreciate negative criticism just as much as I appreciate positive criticism.
I also see that you have just joined the forum yesterday. Welcome here! I am Liquid and I am the writer of this story, it's nice to meet you.
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And this is why we can't have nice things.
Dude, no one asked you to come here. So if you want to be a little bitch about it then do us all a favor and get the hell out. Liquid has excelled as a writer on this forum and you have no right to be instigating any trouble here. You literally came out of nowhere and started making trouble. So either calm yourself or fuck off.
Ah, I see you're one of these people. I'm at least glad that you haven't disappointed my expectations. While I guess I won't see you around the forums for long, I wish you a lot of fun while it lasts.
And now do me a favour and gtfo. With all due respect of course.
That sounds really great, did not expect actually that it will take your attention... also i am glad that it was readeable, because my English grammar is, oh well... better not to comment on it. :-)
My phone have troubles too, it's also so annoying to read on such small screen, so i understand you totally.
Anyway, thank you, Liquid, looking forward to hear from you! :-)
Welcome to the forums. We're mostly a friendly bunch. I'm sure you'll fit right in. So feel free to sit back and relax... You're home now.
I'm seeing that you're paying attention to the words, but I don't know how much you understand from them. I'm sorry if I offended you by explaining the meaning and the difference between them, no pun intended. The words can't be smart, the people behind them are, words are just thoughts which people express them.
@TDMshadowCP Do you really think I need to prove myself or to anyone else that I'm smarter, if I won't be able to take my master then so be it! Enjoy what you have rather than be what you aren't.
"Education is the kindling of a flame, not the filling of a vessel." - Socrates
God bless you.
@ualexen92 How dare you to define me! It was a stiff joke, stiff humour, even if I'm joking there will be always something to learn from it, I hope.
Overall I'm the one that's messing.
You're... sigh you're right.
I can see it now... I can see everything now. How was I so stupid?
God bless you, Luthor_92Light.
The cringe in this one though.
[Confront Septon Corbin alone] I'm back.
But here's this:
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=lcOxhH8N3Bo
God TellTale.
[Confront Septon Corbin alone]
[Confront Septon Corbin, but take a guard with you]
Not gonna risk getting Jenna killed. Surprisingly, I don't hate her guts like 80% of other readers do xD
[Confront Septon Corbin alone]
I recently found this after returning to the forums.I will need to get caught up but I already submitted a character that I hope you will like.
I realised that maybe the appearance I gave might not be detailed enough.If there are any details you want expanded on just PM me and I will give you them.
Hope you can add my character as well, if you want to know more just ask