You did good on writing. (lol, you put Governor instead of Commander, but I almost did it a couple times to though) And again, i'm really sorry on writing, maybe edit the top part of your post so it fits in with mine maybe?
Austin clutches the meat cleaver in his right hand. He makes sure the commander is sound asleep. "I ain't going to kill you. I'm going to make you pay." He grabs both of the Commanders hands, and holds them firmly. He clenches the meat cleaver and saws off the end of his fingers. "AHHH!!!" The commander comes out of his sleep screaming as the blood comes gushing out of the spot where his fingers should be. He looks up to see Austin at the center of his luxurious tent. Even though he has no fingers, he punches Austin in the face. "You fucker..." Says Austin. He hammers his cleaver at the Commander's hand. He had then begun to pass out.
Austin was starting to hear the voices of the fellow members. "Shit, i better hurry." He begins to do the unthinkable. He pulls down the trousers of the Commander. "This is for Stanley." He saws of the Commanders, -private parts-. He rushes out of the tent and down the hill and makes his way to the motor inn.
"AHHH!!!" The sound of a screaming Commander awakes Zack. He gets out of his sleeping bag, and heads to the Commanders tent. All he sees is the shadow of Austin running down the hill, and Zack feels proud. He goes into the tent and looks at the passed out version of the commander. He hears his fellow comrades talking. "The hell? Did Zack do that to him?" That was the last thing Zack heard before being knocked unconscious onto the tent floor.
Quincy, and Samuel, quickly bandage up the Commander and....
hi, not being a grammar nazi or anything but try to correct some grammar mistakes like "an breakfast" to "a breakfast" and such to make the story more fluid and rich, looking forward to writing with you guys
The next day...
The zombies had come as Mike had said, and they were all brainless. The group found some good loot: plenty of bullets, a po… morecket knife, a Bowie knife, a screwdriver and a hatchet. And things were going as good as they had been. The group had an good breakfast, plenty good, and Alexander talked to
[A. Mike]
[B. Melody]
[X. Danny]
[Y. Gloria]
Quincy, and Samuel, quickly bandage up the Commander and make sure that he hasn't died from blood loss "He's ok.. for now, at least.." Quincy hesitatingly says, "Jesus fuck, why did he do this.." Samuel mumbles to himself. "Dunno, but he's a threat now, and you know what we have to do.." "YOU MEAN KILL HIM? HUH?? IS THIS WHAT YOU WANT? HAVEN'T WE SEEN ENOUGH OF OUR OWN DIE?!?" Samuel Yells as he begins to cry and sob uncontrollably "Will you shut the fuck up?! you are going to draw the brain dead if you won't stop crying like a little bitch! If we don't do something about this psychopath we're ALL gonna wind up DEAD!!" "There's another way.. there has to be.." He mutters to himself.
-SCENE SWAP-
"Shit, shit SHIT.." Austin talks to himself as he's running through the woods, He didn't even stop to think about what he's done since he took off running. "I gotta get there and warn them, I HAVE TO!" he says confidently, while dodging multiple of the dead without working a sweat, he's so determined to achieve his goal, that the dead don't even bother him. " Deserved that asshole right.." He says " I hope he learned a lesson because if not, I'm gonn-OOF!" Austin can't complete his sentence before stumbling into a corpse and falling on his face. While he tries to get up, he hadn't noticed that two walkers were closing in on him and urging him into falling on his back and crawling at the opposite direction, while shocked and panicked, he has to do something quick, because if not, he belongs to the dead..
CHOICE #18
A) Fight off the dead with your bear hands. Grab a nearby rock and bash one of the walker's skull in. C) Try to run away.
NOTE: This is my first post here, tried to bring out some of the more humane side out of Samuel, Feedback is always appreciated
Ok, Cough cough:
Quincy, and Samuel, quickly bandage up the Commander and make sure that he hasn't died from blood loss "He's ok.. for now,… more at least.." Quincy hesitatingly says, "Jesus fuck, why did he do this.." Samuel mumbles to himself. "Dunno, but he's a threat now, and you know what we have to do.." "YOU MEAN KILL HIM? HUH?? IS THIS WHAT YOU WANT? HAVEN'T WE SEEN ENOUGH OF OUR OWN DIE?!?" Samuel Yells as he begins to cry and sob uncontrollably "Will you shut the fuck up?! you are going to draw the brain dead if you won't stop crying like a little bitch! If we don't do something about this psychopath we're ALL gonna wind up DEAD!!" "There's another way.. there has to be.." He mutters to himself.
-SCENE SWAP-
"Shit, shit SHIT.." Austin talks to himself as he's running through the woods, He didn't even stop to think about what he's done since he took off running. "I gotta get there and warn them, I HAVE TO!" he says confidently, while … [view original content]
Austin thinks as fast as he could. He grabs a big rock and bashes the closest walker. It's head is impaled into the grass. He wasn't quite as fast for the second walker though. It was nearly biting his leg, as he kicks it away. He only has little time, to impale this walkers head in, he bashes the neck of the walker and the head flew over Austins face. Nearly biting him, as it did. Austin is now breathing heavily. He gets up, and realizes that he has been running, so fast, and so far, that he has no clue where he is at. "Shit..." He says, before stepping on the head of the second walker.
Scene swap
"So what are we gonna do, kill the kid?" Says Quincy. Samuel buts in. " I said it before, and i'll say it again, we don't kill him. We have seen WAY to many die. But man, I wish Stanley were here, he'd know what to do." Samuel picks up the body of the Commander to check if he has any bruises on his back, when something comes rolling from underneath him. "ahh, EW!" Quincy says, as he pukes up dinner. "Is that his, D!#K? I guess were going to have to kill Zack, he way over stepped it." Says Samuel. Samuel picks up the meat cleaver that has been left, and was about to cut of the head of Zack. "Wait! Don't kill me! Says an awaking Zack. "Why did you do this to him?" Zack steps up. "Huh, I didn't do anything. I was sleeping just like you guys." Quincy laughs. "Then why did we find you in here?" Zack thinks back to the moment when he saw Austin running down the hill. "It was Austin." He says. Quincy laughs again. "The commander killed him don't you remember? Nice excuse though." The commander begins to wake up. "Alright let's ask him then. Hello sir, erm, who did this to you?" The commander gives Quincy the dirty eye. "I'm in this cough condition and you want to know who did it to me? I don't even remember who did it to me. All I remember was i hit em' in the face." Quincy looks at Zack's face. "Huh no bruises. I guess your off the hook." The commander looks back at Quincy. "You gonna do something about this? Look at me i've lost a hand, lost the ends of my fingers on my other hand, and i have no balls." Zack laughs, and mumbles. "That's not a problem, since you've never really had any." The commander takes no time to punch Zack with his weaker left hand. "Shit!" He says as the pain from a punch with no fingers goes through his hand.
"Where am I?" Austin asked himself. He gazed at the trees, pines and oaks looming large against the tiny human in the darkness. Realizing he needed to continue moving, he forced himself forward to a fast-flowing creek where a little tent sat nearby. "Is somebody in there?" He asked himself before grabbing a particularly sharp stick. He snuck toward the tent at an agonizingly slow pace. He looked inside the tent using the stick to probe. Nothing, Austin sighed as he began rooting for supplies. He had barely finished stuffing a can of green beans in his backpack when a rifle barrel touched his back, "Austin, old friend, what are you doing?" Austin turned around. "Oh my God, it can't be..." He muttered in shock.
Of course! We always need new people.
Especially now when it's just me and maybe 2 - 3 others.
We used to have another site with 50+ members, then we decided to move to another forum, and no one came except for all the admins and mods.
"It can be, and it is" Muttered the man. "Why don't we take a trip down memory lane? But first put my shit down." Muttered the stranger.
**Hours later... ** "Huh that's weird" Says Gloria. "Huh, what's weird?" Asks Melody. "Alex, he's always up by now. Normally he's the first one up. I ought a go check on him." Gloria walks up the steps to the second floor and knocks. She glances into the window and sees a dresser blocking the view to the bedroom. "The hell?" She begins pounding on the door.
Alex had stayed up the rest of the night, expecting whoever was outside to try to kill him. He waited, and waited, and waited, when all of a sudden he hears a knock on the door. "Shit... shit shit shit shit!!!" He says to himself. There was then a moment of silence when he starts to hear banging. "Alex, are you in there?"
Alex almost immediately opens the door to his room, and runs into his moms arm. (See what I did there?) He completely forgot about the fact that she only had one arm, and continued hugging. "Alex what's wrong?" Alex had told his mom the story. "Alex, are you sure you weren't just dreaming?" Alex stopped the long hug, and lets go. "You don't believe me? You don't believe me he repeats over and over. He then proceeds to walk backwards into his room and locks the door.
"It can be, and it is" Muttered the man. "Why don't we take a trip down memory lane? But first put my shit down." Muttered the stranger.
**… moreHours later... ** "Huh that's weird" Says Gloria. "Huh, what's weird?" Asks Melody. "Alex, he's always up by now. Normally he's the first one up. I ought a go check on him." Gloria walks up the steps to the second floor and knocks. She glances into the window and sees a dresser blocking the view to the bedroom. "The hell?" She begins pounding on the door.
Alex had stayed up the rest of the night, expecting whoever was outside to try to kill him. He waited, and waited, and waited, when all of a sudden he hears a knock on the door. "Shit... shit shit shit shit!!!" He says to himself. There was then a moment of silence when he starts to hear banging. "Alex, are you in there?"
Alex almost immediately opens the door to his room, and runs into his moms arm. (See what I did there?) He completely forgot about… [view original content]
Austin looks in disbelief to see Stanley standing over top of him. Stanley starts off telling Austin how he is still alive he tells him I was shot got my stuff taken from me and in the middle of nowhere. I wondered aimlessly looking for hope looking for revenge. I met this guy name was Mike. We got split when we ran into a huge herd. Austin tells him about the camp we need to get moving to the motel.
Choice: A. Stanley goes with Austin to the motel, B. Stanley tells Austin to join him and leave this state and be gone forever.
"Why are you out here by yourself, Austin?" Stanley asked. "I... Cut the Commander's fingers and his dick off." Austin replied. Stanley smiled. "You showed that motherfuckin' asshat." "Yeah. We stole from some people at a motel on down that road from Save-Lots, and I wanna use them to help in the fight against the Commander." Stanley pondered the news for a second, scratching his chin. Then he said, "That's near where Mike and I got separated. Maybe they've seen 'im." "So you're coming?" "Hell, yeah." The two dismantled the tent, packed their bags full of cans and supplies and walked to the Travelier Motel.
-- SCENE SHIFT --
Gloria sniffled quietly as she looked at her stump, remembering how she had once caressed Mike with that hand. She remembered feeling a connection she hadn't felt since she met Alexander's father nineteen years ago. She calmed herself, or tried to, just as Alexander finally walked out of his room. He walked by his mother's side, muttering something incredibly softly. "What are you saying?" Gloria asked.
[MAJOR CHOICE - CHOICE #20]
[A. I'm gonna fucking kill Danny...] [B. I didn't dream...] [X. Nothing you give a damn about...] [Y. ...]
This is an idea what about in the main post up top you put the characters names and who they are just a little easier for people to understand I think and also **my choice is A **
"Why are you out here by yourself, Austin?" Stanley asked. "I... Cut the Commander's fingers and his dick off." Austin replied. Stanley smiled… more. "You showed that motherfuckin' asshat." "Yeah. We stole from some people at a motel on down that road from Save-Lots, and I wanna use them to help in the fight against the Commander." Stanley pondered the news for a second, scratching his chin. Then he said, "That's near where Mike and I got separated. Maybe they've seen 'im." "So you're coming?" "Hell, yeah." The two dismantled the tent, packed their bags full of cans and supplies and walked to the Travelier Motel.
-- SCENE SHIFT --
Gloria sniffled quietly as she looked at her stump, remembering how she had once caressed Mike with that hand. She remembered feeling a connection she hadn't felt since she met Alexander's father nineteen years ago. She calmed herself, or tried to, just as Alexander finally walked out of his room. He walked by his mothe… [view original content]
Well he's justified in being pissed. Danny killed Mike, a nice guy and friend; zombie Mike bit Gloria, which resulted in an amputation. If that were my mother being bit, Danny'd have more than Hell to pay.
"Why are you out here by yourself, Austin?" Stanley asked. "I... Cut the Commander's fingers and his dick off." Austin replied. Stanley smiled… more. "You showed that motherfuckin' asshat." "Yeah. We stole from some people at a motel on down that road from Save-Lots, and I wanna use them to help in the fight against the Commander." Stanley pondered the news for a second, scratching his chin. Then he said, "That's near where Mike and I got separated. Maybe they've seen 'im." "So you're coming?" "Hell, yeah." The two dismantled the tent, packed their bags full of cans and supplies and walked to the Travelier Motel.
-- SCENE SHIFT --
Gloria sniffled quietly as she looked at her stump, remembering how she had once caressed Mike with that hand. She remembered feeling a connection she hadn't felt since she met Alexander's father nineteen years ago. She calmed herself, or tried to, just as Alexander finally walked out of his room. He walked by his mothe… [view original content]
This is an idea what about in the main post up top you put the characters names and who they are just a little easier for people to understand I think and also **my choice is A **
Hey guys, i'm not interfering with the MAJOR CHOICE scene, i'm going to back to the other to locations.
"I'm just in disbelief here Stanley. I thought- we all thought you were dead. Can you tell me how you survived?" Austin asks, as they are making their way to the motor inn. Stanley laughs. "Well you see here, Austin, I didn't survive." Austin looks back at Stanley, and his body begins to disappear. "Huh? Stanley?! Stanley!!" The realization of a hallucination goes through the mind of Austin. Am I that crazy? I thought Stanley was alive? His thoughts speak loud. When all of a sudden he wakes up from a daydream.
The rifle still pointing at his back, "Austin, old friend, what are you doing?" Austin turned around. "Oh my God, it can't be..." He muttered in shock. "I'm- i'm crazy." Austin says. His attacker, began to speak. "Now listen to me loud and clear. Drop my shit or I shoot." Austin slowly puts his stuff down when the man continues. "You and your group, killed every last one of us. Except me, I got away. Now explain to me, why the hell I shouldn't shoot." Austin waits a minute and begins to speak. "I'm not with them anymore. I'm going to this new group, i'm going to have them help me kill them." The new man takes the rifle away, and shows himself to Austin. He lowers his dark black hood, and reveals his scarred up face. "I'm with you the man says."
As the tow make their way to the motor inn. "How did you know my name anyway?" Asks Austin. "I've been following you guys, ever since you guys took out the last group at the motor inn. In fact, I stopped following you a couple days ago." Austin laughs. "Haha, well, i don't think I caught your name did I?" The man glances down at Austin. "My name is Matt."
If you guys are confused on the beginning part, the whole Stanley scene was just a daydream. (Hallucination, at the same time) After his daydream he was back at the spot where the rifled man stood behind him.
Can I do a character bio thing? Where I describe the characters into more detail, if people want to know the characters a little better if they are considering writing.
Can I do a character bio thing? Where I describe the characters into more detail, if people want to know the characters a little better if they are considering writing.
Alexander: Status: Alive.... A young 16 year old boy, he is part of the motor inn group. He has a single mother. And is learning how to shoot from his Mentor Danny. He is outgoing and likes most people he comes across. Though he isn't very good at shooting, he loves it very much. ASSOCIATED PEOPLE: Danny, and Gloria.
Austin: Status: Dead....Used to be part of the bandit group, but is now on his way to the motor inn. He has hate for the Commander, and his best friend was killed by the Commander. He tends to think slowly, when he is in a situation. He died from a gunshot wound by Alexander. ASSOCIATED PEOPLE: Commander,Quincy, Samuel, Stanley, and Zack.
Commander: Status Alive.....Leader of the bandit group that has been stalking the motor inn group. He is a complete psychopath, and has killed many who don't agree with him. Including Stanley, the friend to Austin. He will do whatever it takes to get his way, if that means torturing somebody or killing somebody who doesn't agree with him, he will do it. ASSOCIATED PEOPLE: Austin, Quincy, Samuel, and Zack.
Danny: Status: Dead...He is a part of the motor inn group, and has shown that when he doesn't take things lightly. If he distrusts someone he will resort to murder if he has to. He also is teaching Alexander how to shoot a gun. He gave his life because he couldn't live with the fact that Gloria hated him. Before he died, he left a letter for Alexander to find. ASSOCIATED PEOPLE: Alexander, Gloria, and Mike.
Gloria: Status: Alive... She is the mother to Alexander, and is part of the motor inn group. She was shown to have feelings for the newcomer Mike. And was bit by his zombified self. She had to have her arm cut off, and is still mad at Danny. ASSOSIATED PEOPLE: Alexander, Mike, and Danny.
Matt: Status: Alive...Though we don't know much about him, all of his group was shot by the bandit group. He is know on his way to the motor inn group with Austin. ASSOCIATED PEOPLE: Austin.
Melody: Status: Alive....Part of the motor inn group. She does whatever it takes to survive, she had to cut of her friends arm. And if you want to see more on her character go to our other fanfic 'Continuing upon the end of S1 Fan fic'... ASSOCIATED PEOPLE : Alexander, Danny, and Gloria.
Mike: Status: Dead....Had joined the motor inn group, and had feelings for Gloria, but was almost instantly killed by Danny. And his zombified self had bit his lover Gloria. ASSOCIATED PEOPLE: Alexander, Danny, and Gloria.
Quincy: Status: Alive....Part of the bandit group.The right hand man for the Commander. He is the only one who will fully stick up for him, compared to the other bandits. He is a tough man who can win a fight against nearly anybody he takes on. ASSOCIATED PEOPLE: Austin, Commander, Samuel, and Zack.
Samuel: Status alive... He is part of the bandit group, and is 50/50 with the commander, sometimes he will stick up for him, and other times he will disagree with him. ASSOCIATED PEOPLE: Austin, Commander, Quincy, and Zack.
Stanley: Status: Dead.... He used to be part of the bandit group before the Commander killed him. It is unknown how he died, or why, but he was best friends to Austin. ASSOCIATED PEOPLE: Austin, and Commander.
Zack: Part of the bandit group, and has been best friends with Austin since the death of Stanley. He almost always disagrees or argues with the Commander. ASSOCIATED PEOPLE: Austin, and the Commander.
I did this all alphabetically.
This is just some information regarding the characters
This is as of page 7.
Thank you for participating/reading. We hope you continue to do both.
Hey guys, i'm not interfering with the MAJOR CHOICE scene, i'm going to back to the other to locations.
"I'm just in disbelief here Stanley… more. I thought- we all thought you were dead. Can you tell me how you survived?" Austin asks, as they are making their way to the motor inn. Stanley laughs. "Well you see here, Austin, I didn't survive." Austin looks back at Stanley, and his body begins to disappear. "Huh? Stanley?! Stanley!!" The realization of a hallucination goes through the mind of Austin. Am I that crazy? I thought Stanley was alive? His thoughts speak loud. When all of a sudden he wakes up from a daydream.
The rifle still pointing at his back, "Austin, old friend, what are you doing?" Austin turned around. "Oh my God, it can't be..." He muttered in shock. "I'm- i'm crazy." Austin says. His attacker, began to speak. "Now listen to me loud and clear. Drop my shit or I shoot." Austin slowly puts his stuff down when the man continues. "… [view original content]
Thanks I appreciate it. I'm planning on writing a fanfic that'll tell an original story in TWD universe, I'll post the link here if anyone is up for that
Thanks I appreciate it. I'm planning on writing a fanfic that'll tell an original story in TWD universe, I'll post the link here if anyone is up for that
"Why are you out here by yourself, Austin?" Stanley asked. "I... Cut the Commander's fingers and his dick off." Austin replied. Stanley smiled… more. "You showed that motherfuckin' asshat." "Yeah. We stole from some people at a motel on down that road from Save-Lots, and I wanna use them to help in the fight against the Commander." Stanley pondered the news for a second, scratching his chin. Then he said, "That's near where Mike and I got separated. Maybe they've seen 'im." "So you're coming?" "Hell, yeah." The two dismantled the tent, packed their bags full of cans and supplies and walked to the Travelier Motel.
-- SCENE SHIFT --
Gloria sniffled quietly as she looked at her stump, remembering how she had once caressed Mike with that hand. She remembered feeling a connection she hadn't felt since she met Alexander's father nineteen years ago. She calmed herself, or tried to, just as Alexander finally walked out of his room. He walked by his mothe… [view original content]
CHARACTER BIO
Alexander: Status: Alive.... A young 16 year old boy, he is part of the motor inn group. He has a single mother. And is learn… moreing how to shoot from his Mentor Danny. He is outgoing and likes most people he comes across. Though he isn't very good at shooting, he loves it very much. ASSOCIATED PEOPLE: Danny, and Gloria.
Austin: Status: Dead....Used to be part of the bandit group, but is now on his way to the motor inn. He has hate for the Commander, and his best friend was killed by the Commander. He tends to think slowly, when he is in a situation. He died from a gunshot wound by Alexander. ASSOCIATED PEOPLE: Commander,Quincy, Samuel, Stanley, and Zack.
Commander: Status Alive.....Leader of the bandit group that has been stalking the motor inn group. He is a complete psychopath, and has killed many who don't agree with him. Including Stanley, the friend to Austin. He will do whatever it takes to get his way, if that means tor… [view original content]
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I could make it so that the scene in the tent happens at the same time as Austin tries to get revenge.
Alright, good idea, so make sure to chose plan B, C, or D. I'm excited to see how that scene turns out. XD
Alright, I'm gonna write that part now.
That's the key word Yet.
I'm going to go, i'm going to make sure Austin pulls a Michone on the commander. (You will only get that reference if you read the comics)
Austin clutches the meat cleaver in his right hand. He makes sure the commander is sound asleep. "I ain't going to kill you. I'm going to make you pay." He grabs both of the Commanders hands, and holds them firmly. He clenches the meat cleaver and saws off the end of his fingers. "AHHH!!!" The commander comes out of his sleep screaming as the blood comes gushing out of the spot where his fingers should be. He looks up to see Austin at the center of his luxurious tent. Even though he has no fingers, he punches Austin in the face. "You fucker..." Says Austin. He hammers his cleaver at the Commander's hand. He had then begun to pass out.
Austin was starting to hear the voices of the fellow members. "Shit, i better hurry." He begins to do the unthinkable. He pulls down the trousers of the Commander. "This is for Stanley." He saws of the Commanders, -private parts-. He rushes out of the tent and down the hill and makes his way to the motor inn.
"AHHH!!!" The sound of a screaming Commander awakes Zack. He gets out of his sleeping bag, and heads to the Commanders tent. All he sees is the shadow of Austin running down the hill, and Zack feels proud. He goes into the tent and looks at the passed out version of the commander. He hears his fellow comrades talking. "The hell? Did Zack do that to him?" That was the last thing Zack heard before being knocked unconscious onto the tent floor.
Quincy, and Samuel, quickly bandage up the Commander and....
Please continue... (Note: Sorry about the length)
I don't think anyone is really capable of "pulling a Michonne" other than Michonne. Or Negan.
hi, not being a grammar nazi or anything but try to correct some grammar mistakes like "an breakfast" to "a breakfast" and such to make the story more fluid and rich, looking forward to writing with you guys
is anyone writing, if yes say here because I have some ideas..
Anyone?
No, you can write.
Ok, Cough cough:
Quincy, and Samuel, quickly bandage up the Commander and make sure that he hasn't died from blood loss "He's ok.. for now, at least.." Quincy hesitatingly says, "Jesus fuck, why did he do this.." Samuel mumbles to himself. "Dunno, but he's a threat now, and you know what we have to do.." "YOU MEAN KILL HIM? HUH?? IS THIS WHAT YOU WANT? HAVEN'T WE SEEN ENOUGH OF OUR OWN DIE?!?" Samuel Yells as he begins to cry and sob uncontrollably "Will you shut the fuck up?! you are going to draw the brain dead if you won't stop crying like a little bitch! If we don't do something about this psychopath we're ALL gonna wind up DEAD!!" "There's another way.. there has to be.." He mutters to himself.
-SCENE SWAP-
"Shit, shit SHIT.." Austin talks to himself as he's running through the woods, He didn't even stop to think about what he's done since he took off running. "I gotta get there and warn them, I HAVE TO!" he says confidently, while dodging multiple of the dead without working a sweat, he's so determined to achieve his goal, that the dead don't even bother him. " Deserved that asshole right.." He says " I hope he learned a lesson because if not, I'm gonn-OOF!" Austin can't complete his sentence before stumbling into a corpse and falling on his face. While he tries to get up, he hadn't noticed that two walkers were closing in on him and urging him into falling on his back and crawling at the opposite direction, while shocked and panicked, he has to do something quick, because if not, he belongs to the dead..
CHOICE #18
A) Fight off the dead with your bear hands.
Grab a nearby rock and bash one of the walker's skull in. C) Try to run away.
NOTE: This is my first post here, tried to bring out some of the more humane side out of Samuel, Feedback is always appreciated
oops, double comment, fixed.
Nice. The way you were writing, it seems like you have written more than once, lol.
Austin thinks as fast as he could. He grabs a big rock and bashes the closest walker. It's head is impaled into the grass. He wasn't quite as fast for the second walker though. It was nearly biting his leg, as he kicks it away. He only has little time, to impale this walkers head in, he bashes the neck of the walker and the head flew over Austins face. Nearly biting him, as it did. Austin is now breathing heavily. He gets up, and realizes that he has been running, so fast, and so far, that he has no clue where he is at. "Shit..." He says, before stepping on the head of the second walker.
Scene swap
"So what are we gonna do, kill the kid?" Says Quincy. Samuel buts in. " I said it before, and i'll say it again, we don't kill him. We have seen WAY to many die. But man, I wish Stanley were here, he'd know what to do." Samuel picks up the body of the Commander to check if he has any bruises on his back, when something comes rolling from underneath him. "ahh, EW!" Quincy says, as he pukes up dinner. "Is that his, D!#K? I guess were going to have to kill Zack, he way over stepped it." Says Samuel. Samuel picks up the meat cleaver that has been left, and was about to cut of the head of Zack. "Wait! Don't kill me! Says an awaking Zack. "Why did you do this to him?" Zack steps up. "Huh, I didn't do anything. I was sleeping just like you guys." Quincy laughs. "Then why did we find you in here?" Zack thinks back to the moment when he saw Austin running down the hill. "It was Austin." He says. Quincy laughs again. "The commander killed him don't you remember? Nice excuse though." The commander begins to wake up. "Alright let's ask him then. Hello sir, erm, who did this to you?" The commander gives Quincy the dirty eye. "I'm in this cough condition and you want to know who did it to me? I don't even remember who did it to me. All I remember was i hit em' in the face." Quincy looks at Zack's face. "Huh no bruises. I guess your off the hook." The commander looks back at Quincy. "You gonna do something about this? Look at me i've lost a hand, lost the ends of my fingers on my other hand, and i have no balls." Zack laughs, and mumbles. "That's not a problem, since you've never really had any." The commander takes no time to punch Zack with his weaker left hand. "Shit!" He says as the pain from a punch with no fingers goes through his hand.
PLEASE CONTINUE
Thanks, it really is my first time.
sry, I gotta get some rest, it's night in Israel, I'll join you tomorrow
Aight, cool. See you tomorrow.
you've got some writing talent, dude. Maybe you should write a novel or something.
Alright, I shall continue.
"Where am I?" Austin asked himself. He gazed at the trees, pines and oaks looming large against the tiny human in the darkness. Realizing he needed to continue moving, he forced himself forward to a fast-flowing creek where a little tent sat nearby. "Is somebody in there?" He asked himself before grabbing a particularly sharp stick. He snuck toward the tent at an agonizingly slow pace. He looked inside the tent using the stick to probe. Nothing, Austin sighed as he began rooting for supplies. He had barely finished stuffing a can of green beans in his backpack when a rifle barrel touched his back, "Austin, old friend, what are you doing?" Austin turned around. "Oh my God, it can't be..." He muttered in shock.
PLEASE CONTINUE
That sounds really cool I might join if that's ok and I'm not just talking about dead zone I am going to also start on this slso
"It can be, and it is" Muttered the man. "Why don't we take a trip down memory lane? But first put my shit down." Muttered the stranger.
**Hours later... ** "Huh that's weird" Says Gloria. "Huh, what's weird?" Asks Melody. "Alex, he's always up by now. Normally he's the first one up. I ought a go check on him." Gloria walks up the steps to the second floor and knocks. She glances into the window and sees a dresser blocking the view to the bedroom. "The hell?" She begins pounding on the door.
Alex had stayed up the rest of the night, expecting whoever was outside to try to kill him. He waited, and waited, and waited, when all of a sudden he hears a knock on the door. "Shit... shit shit shit shit!!!" He says to himself. There was then a moment of silence when he starts to hear banging. "Alex, are you in there?"
Alex almost immediately opens the door to his room, and runs into his moms arm. (See what I did there?) He completely forgot about the fact that she only had one arm, and continued hugging. "Alex what's wrong?" Alex had told his mom the story. "Alex, are you sure you weren't just dreaming?" Alex stopped the long hug, and lets go. "You don't believe me? You don't believe me he repeats over and over. He then proceeds to walk backwards into his room and locks the door.
May I start where you left off
Austin looks in disbelief to see Stanley standing over top of him. Stanley starts off telling Austin how he is still alive he tells him I was shot got my stuff taken from me and in the middle of nowhere. I wondered aimlessly looking for hope looking for revenge. I met this guy name was Mike. We got split when we ran into a huge herd. Austin tells him about the camp we need to get moving to the motel.
Choice: A. Stanley goes with Austin to the motel, B. Stanley tells Austin to join him and leave this state and be gone forever.
"Why are you out here by yourself, Austin?" Stanley asked. "I... Cut the Commander's fingers and his dick off." Austin replied. Stanley smiled. "You showed that motherfuckin' asshat." "Yeah. We stole from some people at a motel on down that road from Save-Lots, and I wanna use them to help in the fight against the Commander." Stanley pondered the news for a second, scratching his chin. Then he said, "That's near where Mike and I got separated. Maybe they've seen 'im." "So you're coming?" "Hell, yeah." The two dismantled the tent, packed their bags full of cans and supplies and walked to the Travelier Motel.
-- SCENE SHIFT --
Gloria sniffled quietly as she looked at her stump, remembering how she had once caressed Mike with that hand. She remembered feeling a connection she hadn't felt since she met Alexander's father nineteen years ago. She calmed herself, or tried to, just as Alexander finally walked out of his room. He walked by his mother's side, muttering something incredibly softly. "What are you saying?" Gloria asked.
[MAJOR CHOICE - CHOICE #20]
[A. I'm gonna fucking kill Danny...] [B. I didn't dream...] [X. Nothing you give a damn about...] [Y. ...]
This is an idea what about in the main post up top you put the characters names and who they are just a little easier for people to understand I think and also **my choice is A **
B Not trying to be offensive or anything, but why would he want to kill Danny? (Choice A) They had begun to start getting along again.
Well he's justified in being pissed. Danny killed Mike, a nice guy and friend; zombie Mike bit Gloria, which resulted in an amputation. If that were my mother being bit, Danny'd have more than Hell to pay.
A
I'll do a summary after this little arc ends, or if peeps want it earlier than that, I'll do it.
Hey guys, i'm not interfering with the MAJOR CHOICE scene, i'm going to back to the other to locations.
"I'm just in disbelief here Stanley. I thought- we all thought you were dead. Can you tell me how you survived?" Austin asks, as they are making their way to the motor inn. Stanley laughs. "Well you see here, Austin, I didn't survive." Austin looks back at Stanley, and his body begins to disappear. "Huh? Stanley?! Stanley!!" The realization of a hallucination goes through the mind of Austin. Am I that crazy? I thought Stanley was alive? His thoughts speak loud. When all of a sudden he wakes up from a daydream.
The rifle still pointing at his back, "Austin, old friend, what are you doing?" Austin turned around. "Oh my God, it can't be..." He muttered in shock. "I'm- i'm crazy." Austin says. His attacker, began to speak. "Now listen to me loud and clear. Drop my shit or I shoot." Austin slowly puts his stuff down when the man continues. "You and your group, killed every last one of us. Except me, I got away. Now explain to me, why the hell I shouldn't shoot." Austin waits a minute and begins to speak. "I'm not with them anymore. I'm going to this new group, i'm going to have them help me kill them." The new man takes the rifle away, and shows himself to Austin. He lowers his dark black hood, and reveals his scarred up face. "I'm with you the man says."
As the tow make their way to the motor inn. "How did you know my name anyway?" Asks Austin. "I've been following you guys, ever since you guys took out the last group at the motor inn. In fact, I stopped following you a couple days ago." Austin laughs. "Haha, well, i don't think I caught your name did I?" The man glances down at Austin. "My name is Matt."
Can I do a character bio thing? Where I describe the characters into more detail, if people want to know the characters a little better if they are considering writing.
Sure. That'll help tremendously.
CHARACTER BIO
Alexander: Status: Alive.... A young 16 year old boy, he is part of the motor inn group. He has a single mother. And is learning how to shoot from his Mentor Danny. He is outgoing and likes most people he comes across. Though he isn't very good at shooting, he loves it very much. ASSOCIATED PEOPLE: Danny, and Gloria.
Austin: Status: Dead....Used to be part of the bandit group, but is now on his way to the motor inn. He has hate for the Commander, and his best friend was killed by the Commander. He tends to think slowly, when he is in a situation. He died from a gunshot wound by Alexander. ASSOCIATED PEOPLE: Commander,Quincy, Samuel, Stanley, and Zack.
Commander: Status Alive.....Leader of the bandit group that has been stalking the motor inn group. He is a complete psychopath, and has killed many who don't agree with him. Including Stanley, the friend to Austin. He will do whatever it takes to get his way, if that means torturing somebody or killing somebody who doesn't agree with him, he will do it. ASSOCIATED PEOPLE: Austin, Quincy, Samuel, and Zack.
Danny: Status: Dead...He is a part of the motor inn group, and has shown that when he doesn't take things lightly. If he distrusts someone he will resort to murder if he has to. He also is teaching Alexander how to shoot a gun. He gave his life because he couldn't live with the fact that Gloria hated him. Before he died, he left a letter for Alexander to find. ASSOCIATED PEOPLE: Alexander, Gloria, and Mike.
Gloria: Status: Alive... She is the mother to Alexander, and is part of the motor inn group. She was shown to have feelings for the newcomer Mike. And was bit by his zombified self. She had to have her arm cut off, and is still mad at Danny. ASSOSIATED PEOPLE: Alexander, Mike, and Danny.
Matt: Status: Alive...Though we don't know much about him, all of his group was shot by the bandit group. He is know on his way to the motor inn group with Austin. ASSOCIATED PEOPLE: Austin.
Melody: Status: Alive....Part of the motor inn group. She does whatever it takes to survive, she had to cut of her friends arm. And if you want to see more on her character go to our other fanfic 'Continuing upon the end of S1 Fan fic'... ASSOCIATED PEOPLE : Alexander, Danny, and Gloria.
Mike: Status: Dead....Had joined the motor inn group, and had feelings for Gloria, but was almost instantly killed by Danny. And his zombified self had bit his lover Gloria. ASSOCIATED PEOPLE: Alexander, Danny, and Gloria.
Quincy: Status: Alive....Part of the bandit group.The right hand man for the Commander. He is the only one who will fully stick up for him, compared to the other bandits. He is a tough man who can win a fight against nearly anybody he takes on. ASSOCIATED PEOPLE: Austin, Commander, Samuel, and Zack.
Samuel: Status alive... He is part of the bandit group, and is 50/50 with the commander, sometimes he will stick up for him, and other times he will disagree with him. ASSOCIATED PEOPLE: Austin, Commander, Quincy, and Zack.
Stanley: Status: Dead.... He used to be part of the bandit group before the Commander killed him. It is unknown how he died, or why, but he was best friends to Austin. ASSOCIATED PEOPLE: Austin, and Commander.
Zack: Part of the bandit group, and has been best friends with Austin since the death of Stanley. He almost always disagrees or argues with the Commander. ASSOCIATED PEOPLE: Austin, and the Commander.
I posted it on the next page. (That is if your reading this on page 6.)
(Just wondering so my story is kinda a dream/hallucination and Stanley is actually dead)
Thanks I appreciate it. I'm planning on writing a fanfic that'll tell an original story in TWD universe, I'll post the link here if anyone is up for that
Thanks I appreciate it. I'm planning on writing a fanfic that'll tell an original story in TWD universe, I'll post the link here if anyone is up for that
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Damn, I wish I had joined in earlier. The story is a little messy for me right now, but I'll join as soon as I get a grip on it.