I like it, I think it does show some more personality than your previous work. And with the added visual support your drawings will provide I think it's quite the improvement. I also like how you showed us a glimpse of Nekro's backstory without making it seem like needless exposition.
I like it too, our characters need a breather anyways, and just as 1guy said this small mention isnt just my character spitting out exposition, its actually a genuine line explaining my relation with Mustache. Also, you wrote Nekro the first few times and then just started calling me Pete. Hah, i do this all the time when i write my own stuff about my character
Do you actually wanna see what i wrote? I can always send the text by mail or even Steam.
I would really like my char to go in that direction. Its a helluva read though.
I like it, I think it does show some more personality than your previous work. And with the added visual support your drawings will provide … moreI think it's quite the improvement. I also like how you showed us a glimpse of Nekro's backstory without making it seem like needless exposition.
Overall, it's very good. : )
Finally! I've been waiting for this kind of criticism! THANK YOU! You can't improve without learning from your mistakes after all.
I f… moreelt detached from the characters, firstly. If you want your story to be personal, you have to make me feel close to the characters. Always make sure the readers have the same amount of information as the main protagonist(s). You let us know characters' names, despite the fact the protagonists wouldn't.
You know I would really like that, but it's nearly impossible to do with how much time I have as I know can't do this forever. I would gladly do that however there are people who's roles are large or small. I seen characters appear once and was completely forgotten! (tryin' to avoid that) Plus there always were characters who were developed less than others. Trust me, I think we all know when I say that. I'm not telltale after all, maybe if this was a game, maybe we would've got much more character … [view original content]
I'll give you some quotes I like and links to the lyrics.
First I'll give you some that can possibly used in relation to necromancy.
"The Alchemist"
Stranger than the comet as it streaks across the sky
Stranger than the truth I know before my open eyes
I have dealt in mysteries and trickery, of light to entertain
Looked into the abyss, called it by its name
I have plundered time itself, put the world inside it
And the mysteries, day and night, divide it
A plague of wonders, on your knees beside me
Know the secrets, you shall not deride us
"Only The Good Die Young"
Mystery madman, a victim of cruel charade
Some innocent pawn in an end game, one more stalemate
Is death another birthday?
A way to kiss your dreams goodbye?
Do the undead live within us?
And look through our eyes? http://www.azlyrics.com/lyrics/ironmaiden/onlythegooddieyoung.html
"Gates Of Tomorrow"
Weaving a thread round your heart and your soul
Deceiving your eyes and delaying your goal
Ships in the night when they pass out of sight
Deliver their cargo of earthly delights
"Out Of The Shadows"
Hold a halo 'round the world, golden is the day
Princes of the universe, your burden is the way
So there is no better time who will be born today
A gypsy child at daybreak
A king for a day
Out of the shadow and into the sun
Dreams of the past as the old ways are done
Oh there is beauty and surely there is pain
But we must endure it to live again
"The Clairvoyant"
There's time to live and time to die
When it's time to meet the maker
There's time to live but isn't it strange
That as soon as you're born you're dying...
...and be reborn again?? http://www.azlyrics.com/lyrics/ironmaiden/theclairvoyant.html
"The Clairvoyant"
Feel the sweat break on my brow
Is it me or is it shadows that are
Dancing on the walls.
Is this dream or is it now
Is this a vision or normality I see
Before my eyes.
Just by looking through your eyes
He could see the future penetrating right
In through your mind
See the truth and see your lies
But for all his power couldn't foresee his own demise http://www.azlyrics.com/lyrics/ironmaiden/theclairvoyant.html
"The Legacy"
We seem destined to live in fear
And some that would say Armageddon is near
But where there's a life while there's hope
That man won't self destruct
Why can't we treat our fellow men
With more respect and a shake of their hands
But anger and loathing is rife
The death on all sides is becoming a way of life
We live in an uncertain world
Fear understanding and ignorance is leading to death
Only the corpses are left
For vultures that prey on their bones
But some are just not wanting peace
Their whole life is death and misery
The only thing that they know
Fight fire with fire life is cheap
"Starblind"
Look into our face reflected in the moon glow in your eyes
Remember you can choose to look but not to see and waste your hours
You believe you have the time but I tell you your time is short
See your past and future all the same and it cannot be bought http://www.azlyrics.com/lyrics/ironmaiden/starblind.html
"The Alchemist"
I was the keeper of the books
I had the knowledge of the scrolls
But now through ignorance and fear
I cast a shadow through the years
"Flight of Icarus"
As the sun breaks, above the ground,
An old man stands on the hill.
As the ground warms, to the first rays of light
A birdsong shatters the still.
"The Trooper"
You'll take my life but I'll take yours too
You'll fire your musket but I'll run you through
So when you're waiting for the next attack
You'd better stand there's no turning back. http://www.azlyrics.com/lyrics/ironmaiden/thetrooper.html
"Sun And Steel"
Through earth and water, fire and wind,
You came at last - nothing was the end,
Make a cut by fire and stones,
Take you and your blade and break you both
in two - break you both in two. http://www.azlyrics.com/lyrics/ironmaiden/sunandsteel.html
"The Thin Line Between Love And Hate"
There's a thin line between love and hate
Wider divide that you can see between good and bad
There's a grey place between black and white
But everyone does have the right to choose the path that he takes http://www.azlyrics.com/lyrics/ironmaiden/thethinlinebetweenloveandhate.html
That last bit isn't an Iron Maiden song, but it is their singer Bruce Dickinson's solo work. I felt like it would work, and then I remembered the baddy thread was the Crimson Moon so the King in Crimson fits well there I think.
I like it too, our characters need a breather anyways, and just as 1guy said this small mention isnt just my character spitting out expositi… moreon, its actually a genuine line explaining my relation with Mustache. Also, you wrote Nekro the first few times and then just started calling me Pete. Hah, i do this all the time when i write my own stuff about my character
Do you actually wanna see what i wrote? I can always send the text by mail or even Steam.
I would really like my char to go in that direction. Its a helluva read though.
You know this actually is the way it technically way it was before. I did research on my manga and compared to the anime installation and learned speech patterns are usually made through how one imagines the way they speak. Some speech patterns are unique, but the voice acting on the anime is what made them sound different. Thing is, I never got complaints from my teachers back in Art/English classes on the way they talk so I don't see the difference really. Just saying, hope I didn't offend in any way. :P
I like it, I think it does show some more personality than your previous work. And with the added visual support your drawings will provide … moreI think it's quite the improvement. I also like how you showed us a glimpse of Nekro's backstory without making it seem like needless exposition.
Overall, it's very good. : )
I had reserved spots along with those who asked to join in the very beginning this opened. All spots are closed, cameos are good. Who knows, if I kill enough I might add a few more. I would like to have a few more girls in it, it feels too macho.
I had reserved spots along with those who asked to join in the very beginning this opened. All spots are closed, cameos are good. Who knows, if I kill enough I might add a few more. I would like to have a few more girls in it, it feels too macho.
Can I ask you something, you english speakers? Is my username.. like.. hard to read or something? I know my username is stupid I didn't figure any better, Vince is my favourite dlc character and Kenny my favourite full game character, so that's where it kinda came from.. but anyway, some guy said my username is hard to read, so it put me to think..
I don't know how english sounds/looks to you who's language it is, but to me VinceOrKenny is pretty easy to read.
Edit:I guess the guy was lying then, god damn that sonovabitch >:(
Can I ask you something, you english speakers? Is my username.. like.. hard to read or something? I know my username is stupid I didn't figu… morere any better, Vince is my favourite dlc character and Kenny my favourite full game character, so that's where it kinda came from.. but anyway, some guy said my username is hard to read, so it put me to think..
I don't know how english sounds/looks to you who's language it is, but to me VinceOrKenny is pretty easy to read.
Edit:I guess the guy was lying then, god damn that sonovabitch >:(
Can I ask you something, you english speakers? Is my username.. like.. hard to read or something? I know my username is stupid I didn't figu… morere any better, Vince is my favourite dlc character and Kenny my favourite full game character, so that's where it kinda came from.. but anyway, some guy said my username is hard to read, so it put me to think..
I don't know how english sounds/looks to you who's language it is, but to me VinceOrKenny is pretty easy to read.
Edit:I guess the guy was lying then, god damn that sonovabitch >:(
Can I ask you something, you english speakers? Is my username.. like.. hard to read or something? I know my username is stupid I didn't figu… morere any better, Vince is my favourite dlc character and Kenny my favourite full game character, so that's where it kinda came from.. but anyway, some guy said my username is hard to read, so it put me to think..
I don't know how english sounds/looks to you who's language it is, but to me VinceOrKenny is pretty easy to read.
Edit:I guess the guy was lying then, god damn that sonovabitch >:(
Man I remember the days when this thread was always 3+ pages ahead of where it was the last time I checked it. I guess all the randomness of this one went to the Lounge thread, eh?
Indeed. The EVERYONE APPRECIATION THREAD is officially dead and this one just won't die because it's about Tobi's awesome comic. But yeah, everyone went to the lounge...
Man I remember the days when this thread was always 3+ pages ahead of where it was the last time I checked it. I guess all the randomness of this one went to the Lounge thread, eh?
Indeed. The EVERYONE APPRECIATION THREAD is officially dead and this one just won't die because it's about Tobi's awesome comic. But yeah, everyone went to the lounge...
Yeah I remember that. Those were very good times. I miss it very much actually. It used to be very fun here. Not only did I made this thread for the comic, but also for everyone to talk to. Feeeels...
But I know for certain The Lounge will die out someday too, everything does eventually.
Man I remember the days when this thread was always 3+ pages ahead of where it was the last time I checked it. I guess all the randomness of this one went to the Lounge thread, eh?
Comments
I like it, I think it does show some more personality than your previous work. And with the added visual support your drawings will provide I think it's quite the improvement. I also like how you showed us a glimpse of Nekro's backstory without making it seem like needless exposition.
Overall, it's very good. : )
I like it too, our characters need a breather anyways, and just as 1guy said this small mention isnt just my character spitting out exposition, its actually a genuine line explaining my relation with Mustache. Also, you wrote Nekro the first few times and then just started calling me Pete. Hah, i do this all the time when i write my own stuff about my character
Do you actually wanna see what i wrote? I can always send the text by mail or even Steam.
I would really like my char to go in that direction. Its a helluva read though.
So, Yeah.
I miss you guys, and I was thinking of getting Steam...
Just went through 'Mind Games'
Saw the Puncake story, but couldn't make out the Other thing.
You should do it, i can invite you to our Steam group and we all can chat there. Timezones are a problem though.
You know, speaking of Azlyn, where is she? I haven't seen her in days.
On a trip to Greece.
I'll give you some quotes I like and links to the lyrics.
First I'll give you some that can possibly used in relation to necromancy.
"The Alchemist"
Stranger than the comet as it streaks across the sky
Stranger than the truth I know before my open eyes
I have dealt in mysteries and trickery, of light to entertain
Looked into the abyss, called it by its name
I have plundered time itself, put the world inside it
And the mysteries, day and night, divide it
A plague of wonders, on your knees beside me
Know the secrets, you shall not deride us
Gather round the aimless and the feckless and the lame
Hear the master summon up the spirits by their names
http://www.azlyrics.com/lyrics/ironmaiden/thealchemist.html
"The Reincarnation Of Benjamin Breeg"
The sin of a thousand souls not died in vain
Reincarnate still in me live again
http://www.azlyrics.com/lyrics/ironmaiden/thereincarnationofbenjaminbreeg.html
"Only The Good Die Young"
Mystery madman, a victim of cruel charade
Some innocent pawn in an end game, one more stalemate
Is death another birthday?
A way to kiss your dreams goodbye?
Do the undead live within us?
And look through our eyes?
http://www.azlyrics.com/lyrics/ironmaiden/onlythegooddieyoung.html
"Blood Brothers"
And if you're taking a walk through the garden of life
What do you think you'd expect you would see?
http://www.azlyrics.com/lyrics/ironmaiden/bloodbrothers.html
"Journeyman"
From the red sky of the east
To the sunset in the west
We have cheated death
And he has cheated us
Spare your life and choose the destruction of time over yourself.
http://www.azlyrics.com/lyrics/ironmaiden/journeyman.html
"New Frontier"
Out beyond the new frontier.
Playing god without mercy without fear.
Create a beast made a man without a soul.
http://www.sing365.com/music/lyric.nsf/New-Frontier-lyrics-Iron-Maiden/198841B6EFB37AB448256D3C000DD206
"Gates Of Tomorrow"
Weaving a thread round your heart and your soul
Deceiving your eyes and delaying your goal
Ships in the night when they pass out of sight
Deliver their cargo of earthly delights
To the women and children, the souls of the dead
I've opened their book and no mercy is shed
You want forgiveness and you want it cheap
I don't give redemption rewards for the meek
http://www.azlyrics.com/lyrics/ironmaiden/gatesoftomorrow.html
"Montsegur"
I stand alone in this desolate space. In death they are truly alive.
http://www.sing365.com/music/lyric.nsf/Montsegur-lyrics-Iron-Maiden/9548387266074DD648256D3C000DD8EF
"The Legacy"
Some strange yellow gas
Has played with their minds
Has reddened their eyes
Removed all the lies
And strange as it sounds
Death knows no bounds
How many get well
Only time will tell
Only time will tell
http://www.azlyrics.com/lyrics/ironmaiden/thelegacy.html
"Out Of The Shadows"
Hold a halo 'round the world, golden is the day
Princes of the universe, your burden is the way
So there is no better time who will be born today
A gypsy child at daybreak
A king for a day
Out of the shadow and into the sun
Dreams of the past as the old ways are done
Oh there is beauty and surely there is pain
But we must endure it to live again
Dusty dreams in fading daylight
Flicker on the walls
Nothing new your life's adrift, what purpose to it all?
Eyes are closed and death is calling
Reaching out its hand
Call upon the starlight to surround you
http://www.sing365.com/music/lyric.nsf/Out-Of-the-Shadows-lyrics-Iron-Maiden/F0342234F7B3519C482571DC000ED231
"The Clairvoyant"
There's time to live and time to die
When it's time to meet the maker
There's time to live but isn't it strange
That as soon as you're born you're dying...
...and be reborn again??
http://www.azlyrics.com/lyrics/ironmaiden/theclairvoyant.html
Could be relevant to clairvoyance.
"Seventh Son Of A Seventh Son"
Then they watch the progress he makes
The Good and the evil which path will he take
Both of them trying to manipulate
The use of his powers before it's too late
http://www.azlyrics.com/lyrics/ironmaiden/seventhsonofaseventhson.html
"The Clairvoyant"
Feel the sweat break on my brow
Is it me or is it shadows that are
Dancing on the walls.
Is this dream or is it now
Is this a vision or normality I see
Before my eyes.
Just by looking through your eyes
He could see the future penetrating right
In through your mind
See the truth and see your lies
But for all his power couldn't foresee his own demise
http://www.azlyrics.com/lyrics/ironmaiden/theclairvoyant.html
"Sign Of The Cross"
Standing alone in the wind and rain
Feeling the fear that is growing
Sensing the change in the tide again
Brought by the storm that is brewing
http://www.azlyrics.com/lyrics/ironmaiden/signofthecross.html
"The Wicker Man"
Hand of fate is moving and the finger points to you
http://www.azlyrics.com/lyrics/ironmaiden/thewickerman.html
General use.
"The Mercenary"
Pay to kill, die to lose, hunted, hunter which are you
Diablo come again to make trophies out of men
Nowhere to run, nowhere to hide, you've got to kill to stay alive
http://www.azlyrics.com/lyrics/ironmaiden/themercenary.html
"Brighter Than A Thousand Suns"
Oh Behold the power of man
On its tower ready for the fall
Knocking heads together well
Rise a city build a living hell
Join the race to suicide
Listen for the tolling of the bell
Take a look at your last sky
Guessing you won't have the time to cry
http://www.azlyrics.com/lyrics/ironmaiden/brighterthanathousandsuns.html
"Out Of The Silent Planet"
Withered hands, withered bodies begging for salvation
Deserted by the hand of gods of their own creation
http://www.azlyrics.com/lyrics/ironmaiden/outofthesilentplanet.html
"The Legacy"
We seem destined to live in fear
And some that would say Armageddon is near
But where there's a life while there's hope
That man won't self destruct
Why can't we treat our fellow men
With more respect and a shake of their hands
But anger and loathing is rife
The death on all sides is becoming a way of life
We live in an uncertain world
Fear understanding and ignorance is leading to death
Only the corpses are left
For vultures that prey on their bones
But some are just not wanting peace
Their whole life is death and misery
The only thing that they know
Fight fire with fire life is cheap
But if they do stop to think
That man is teetering right on the brink
But do you think that they care
They benefit from death and pain and despair
http://www.azlyrics.com/lyrics/ironmaiden/thelegacy.html
"El Dorado"
I'm the Jester with no tears
And I'm playing on your fears
There is no easy way
For an honest man today
Which is something you should think of as my lifeboat sails away
http://www.azlyrics.com/lyrics/ironmaiden/eldorado.html
"Starblind"
Look into our face reflected in the moon glow in your eyes
Remember you can choose to look but not to see and waste your hours
You believe you have the time but I tell you your time is short
See your past and future all the same and it cannot be bought
http://www.azlyrics.com/lyrics/ironmaiden/starblind.html
"The Alchemist"
I was the keeper of the books
I had the knowledge of the scrolls
But now through ignorance and fear
I cast a shadow through the years
Know this I will return to this land
Rebuild where the ruins did stand
Chain of the demons set free
Strange alchemy
http://www.azlyrics.com/lyrics/ironmaiden/thealchemist.html
"The Number Of The Beast"
I'm coming back
I will return
And I'll possess your body
and I'll make you burn
I have the fire
I have the force
I have the power
to make my evil take its course
http://www.azlyrics.com/lyrics/ironmaiden/thenumberofthebeast.html
"Flight of Icarus"
As the sun breaks, above the ground,
An old man stands on the hill.
As the ground warms, to the first rays of light
A birdsong shatters the still.
His eyes are ablaze,
See the madman in his gaze.
http://www.azlyrics.com/lyrics/ironmaiden/flightoficarus.html
"The Trooper"
You'll take my life but I'll take yours too
You'll fire your musket but I'll run you through
So when you're waiting for the next attack
You'd better stand there's no turning back.
http://www.azlyrics.com/lyrics/ironmaiden/thetrooper.html
"Sun And Steel"
Through earth and water, fire and wind,
You came at last - nothing was the end,
Make a cut by fire and stones,
Take you and your blade and break you both
in two - break you both in two.
http://www.azlyrics.com/lyrics/ironmaiden/sunandsteel.html
"Flash Of The Blade"
You'll die as you lived
In a flash of the blade
In a corner forgotten by no-one
http://www.azlyrics.com/lyrics/ironmaiden/flashoftheblade.html
"Caught Somewhere In Time"
Time is always on my side
Can I tempt you come with me
Be Devil may care fulfill your dream
http://www.azlyrics.com/lyrics/ironmaiden/caughtsomewhereintime.html
"Moonchild"
A web of fear shall be your coat
To clothe you in the night
A lucky escape for you youngman
For I see you damned in endless night.
http://www.azlyrics.com/lyrics/ironmaiden/moonchild.html
"The Thin Line Between Love And Hate"
There's a thin line between love and hate
Wider divide that you can see between good and bad
There's a grey place between black and white
But everyone does have the right to choose the path that he takes
http://www.azlyrics.com/lyrics/ironmaiden/thethinlinebetweenloveandhate.html
"Die With Your Boots On"
If you're gonna die, die with your boots on,
If you're gonna try, well stick around
http://www.azlyrics.com/lyrics/ironmaiden/diewithyourbootson.html
Possible necromancy chanting.
"King In Crimson"
Arise, awake
The King in Crimson comes
http://www.sing365.com/music/lyric.nsf/King-In-Crimson-lyrics-Bruce-Dickinson/240DB0496ED80F3248256CA200098F5C
That last bit isn't an Iron Maiden song, but it is their singer Bruce Dickinson's solo work. I felt like it would work, and then I remembered the baddy thread was the Crimson Moon so the King in Crimson fits well there I think.
2 weeks
How many days left?
Sure. Send on steam.
Tobi.. Just a question.. I wasn't here when this started.. How did people join?
You know this actually is the way it technically way it was before. I did research on my manga and compared to the anime installation and learned speech patterns are usually made through how one imagines the way they speak. Some speech patterns are unique, but the voice acting on the anime is what made them sound different. Thing is, I never got complaints from my teachers back in Art/English classes on the way they talk so I don't see the difference really. Just saying, hope I didn't offend in any way. :P
Miss you too! Be nice to talk to ya on steam!
Puncakes on sale for 9.1 grand. So a single puncake costs $9100. XD
About half way there! Now I can ink the pages! It's a shorter issue unfortunately. It releases next week! Cheers!
I had reserved spots along with those who asked to join in the very beginning this opened. All spots are closed, cameos are good. Who knows, if I kill enough I might add a few more. I would like to have a few more girls in it, it feels too macho.
I don't know she probably on a different forum with a different Jokerbro now she will never be back D':
Wow chill out dude! D=
Looking forward to it, as always.
Ooh! Early comic! My prayers have been answered! : D
Will it soon be time for Eddie Maiden to slay some trolls or users?
Can I ask you something, you english speakers? Is my username.. like.. hard to read or something? I know my username is stupid I didn't figure any better, Vince is my favourite dlc character and Kenny my favourite full game character, so that's where it kinda came from.. but anyway, some guy said my username is hard to read, so it put me to think..
I don't know how english sounds/looks to you who's language it is, but to me VinceOrKenny is pretty easy to read.
Edit:I guess the guy was lying then, god damn that sonovabitch >:(
Your user name is the easiest to read on the forum and it's good so WAT?
Ok, thanks Mark and c'mon it's not xD.
I agree with Mark, it's not hard to read at all!
She'll be back. Don't worry!
My intention always was releasing every two weeks. Unfortunately shit hits the fan a lot for me.
Darth Eddie! XD
Uh.... Vince-or-Kenny? HOW THE FUCK IS THAT HARD?!
Honestly I think I have one of the hardest usernames to read, just because of the way it's written.
That's why I call you Commenter for short.
And his army of Troopers.
And I call you Tobi.
Man I remember the days when this thread was always 3+ pages ahead of where it was the last time I checked it. I guess all the randomness of this one went to the Lounge thread, eh?
Indeed. The EVERYONE APPRECIATION THREAD is officially dead and this one just won't die because it's about Tobi's awesome comic. But yeah, everyone went to the lounge...
You could say this thread is undead...
Yeah I remember that. Those were very good times. I miss it very much actually. It used to be very fun here. Not only did I made this thread for the comic, but also for everyone to talk to. Feeeels...
But I know for certain The Lounge will die out someday too, everything does eventually.