The resting place

edited December 2014 in Forum Games

I'm making a murder story.

To make a character:

Name:

Age:

Gender:

Personality:

Appearance:

Other info:

I've no setting so a setting suggestion would also be welcomed.

Characters: Jeff Neil, Philip Hoff, Melissa Johnson, Quinn Jefferson, Patrick Willows, Violet Jefferson, Elvira Montgomery, Steven Royald, Christine Morgan, Trevor Pattinson, Character submissions closed

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  • Name: Jeff Neil

    Gender: Male

    Personality: Serious, Kind to others, Caring

    Appearance: About 6'0, Brown Hair, Green Eyes, Brown Leather Jacket, blue jeans,

    Other Info: Likes a challenge.....

  • Thanks for the character!

    Saltlick123 posted: »

    Name: Jeff Neil Gender: Male Personality: Serious, Kind to others, Caring Appearance: About 6'0, Brown Hair, Green Eyes, Brown Leather Jacket, blue jeans, Other Info: Likes a challenge.....

  • Good Luck! Looking forward to it! :D

    Zachiscool posted: »

    Thanks for the character!

  • Name: Phillip Hoff.

    Age: 25.

    Gender: Male.

    Personality: Smart, cool, smartass, funny, nice.

    Appearance: Wears a leather jacket and jeans, with boots. About 5'8, blond hair, blue eye.

    Other info: Jokes around a lot, makes a lot of funny jokes...

  • Thanks for the character!

    NoHopeLeft posted: »

    Name: Phillip Hoff. Age: 25. Gender: Male. Personality: Smart, cool, smartass, funny, nice. Appearance: Wears a leather jacket a

  • No problem.

    Zachiscool posted: »

    Thanks for the character!

  • Thanks!

    supersagig posted: »

    Name: Mellisa Johnson Age: 26 Gender: Female Personality: Agressive , Smart , Envy , Brave Appearance: black long heddle hair , blue eyes , white skin , 5,9 feet tall Other info: She´s a cop

  • Name: Mellisa Johnson

    Age: 26

    Gender: Female

    Personality: Agressive , Smart , Envy , Brave

    Appearance: black long heddle hair , blue eyes , white skin , 5,9 feet tall

    Other info: She´s a cop

  • Also the story will be set in a mansion in The country side

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    Zachiscool posted: »

    Also the story will be set in a mansion in The country side

  • Also I would like to get 8-10 characters on here. And submissions will be closed as soon as I begin the story

  • Name: Quinn Jefferson

    Age: 15

    Gender: Female

    Personality: Dumb , Total Bitch , Mean

    Appearance: blonde long curly hair , blue eyes , white skin , 5,8 feet tall

    Other info: She the daughter of the owner of the mansion

  • YAY :p

    Zachiscool posted: »

    Also the story will be set in a mansion in The country side

  • Thanks!

    supersagig posted: »

    Name: Quinn Jefferson Age: 15 Gender: Female Personality: Dumb , Total Bitch , Mean Appearance: blonde long curly hair , blue eyes , white skin , 5,8 feet tall Other info: She the daughter of the owner of the mansion

  • And I'll be making chapters daily. So I'll start today or tomorrow

  • Name: Patrick Willows

    Age: 9

    Gender: Male

    Personality: Smart for his age , Thoughtful , Happy , Coward

    Appearance: black short heddle hair , brown eyes , african-american , 3,8 feet tall ,

    Other info: He´s homeless.

  • Thanks!

    supersagig posted: »

    Name: Patrick Willows Age: 9 Gender: Male Personality: Smart for his age , Thoughtful , Happy , Coward Appearance: black short heddle hair , brown eyes , african-american , 3,8 feet tall , Other info: He´s homeless.

  • Thanks!

    supersagig posted: »

    Name: Violet Jefferson Age: 55 Gender: Female Personality: Calm , Weak , Kind , Serious Appearance: white short curly hair , green eyes , white skin , 5,1 feet tall Other info: She´s the owner of the mansion

  • Name: Violet Jefferson

    Age: 55

    Gender: Female

    Personality: Calm , Weak , Kind , Serious

    Appearance: white short curly hair , green eyes , white skin , 5,1 feet tall

    Other info: She´s the owner of the mansion

  • We just need 2 more people, guys.

  • And I'm gonna make the chapter today at 9:00 so last chance

  • Name: Elvira Montgomery

    Age: 35

    Gender: Female

    Personality: Nervous , A Bit Crazy , Dumb , Emotional

    Appearance: brown short curly hair , brown eyes , brown skin , 6.0 feet tall

    Other info: She´s pregnant

  • Name: Steven Royald

    Age: 44

    Gender: Male

    Personality: Smart , Badass , Not-Talkative , Agressive

    Appearance: bald head , brown eyes , african-american , 6,4 feet tall

    Other info: He´s the guard of the mansion

  • Name: Christine Morgan

    Age: 20

    Gender: Female

    Personality: Dumb , Curious , Coward , Talkative , Sarcastic

    Appearance: red short heddle hair , green eyes , white skin , 5,7 feet tall

    Other info: She´s the butler

  • edited December 2014

    Name: Trevor Pattinson

    Age: 24

    Gender: Male

    Personality: Shy , Nervous , Dumb , Talkative

    Appearance: brown short heddle hair , blue eyes , white skin , 6,1 feet tall

    Other info: He´s a thief

  • Thanks!

    supersagig posted: »

    Name: Elvira Montgomery Age: 35 Gender: Female Personality: Nervous , A Bit Crazy , Dumb , Emotional Appearance: brown short curly hair , brown eyes , brown skin , 6.0 feet tall Other info: She´s pregnant

  • Thanks!

    supersagig posted: »

    Name: Christine Morgan Age: 20 Gender: Female Personality: Dumb , Curious , Coward , Talkative , Sarcastic Appearance: red short heddle hair , green eyes , white skin , 5,7 feet tall Other info: She´s the butler

  • Thanks!

    supersagig posted: »

    Name: Trevor Pattinson Age: 24 Gender: Male Personality: Shy , Nervous , Dumb , Talkative Appearance: brown short heddle hair , blue eyes , white skin , 6,1 feet tall Other info: He´s a thief

  • So, change of plans. Part 1 is coming out today.

  • Thanks!

    supersagig posted: »

    Name: Steven Royald Age: 44 Gender: Male Personality: Smart , Badass , Not-Talkative , Agressive Appearance: bald head , brown eyes , african-american , 6,4 feet tall Other info: He´s the guard of the mansion

  • edited December 2014

    So I was going to wait for more people to join, but I'm bored.

    The resting place part 1

    Jeff Niel

    So I was invited to a Party at the Jefferson's mansion. I got there, and there were 7 other people. So I went to talk to them.

    Jeff: So... What's your name?

    Guy: Philip Hoff.

    Jeff: You know the Jeffersons?

    Philip: Yeah.

    Jeff: Huh.

    Philip: So, this is gonna be fun.

    Jeff: Yep.

    Then I walked over to the cop

    Jeff: Hey.

    Cop: ...Hi...

    Jeff: What's your name?

    Cop: Melissa Johnson.

    Jeff: Oh, I'm Jeff Niel.

    Then the door opens.

    Quinn Jefferson: Come on in, you looneys.

    Then they all walk in, to where Violet Jefferson was standing.

    Violet: Hello. Thank you for coming to the mansion, Trevor Pattinson, Elvira Montgomery, Patrick Willows, Melissa Johnson, Philip Hoff and Jeff Niel. And Christine Morgan and Steven Royald. Today is my birthday. And I wanted to celebrate it with you all. Come along now.

    Then the man I think is Trevor is walking, then something falls out of his pocket.

    Trevor: Shit!!

    Jeff: Wha-

    Then a gunshot is heard in the room next to them. Melissa drew her gun and Steven Leveled his rifle.

    Melissa: Stay there. I'm gonna go check it out.

    Then she walked over and opened the door

    (No choice this part)

    Tell me what you guys think! :D

  • It's great!

    Zachiscool posted: »

    So I was going to wait for more people to join, but I'm bored. The resting place part 1 Jeff Niel So I was invited to a Party at th

  • Great!!

    Zachiscool posted: »

    So I was going to wait for more people to join, but I'm bored. The resting place part 1 Jeff Niel So I was invited to a Party at th

  • Thanks!

    NoHopeLeft posted: »

    It's great!

  • Good Job!

    Zachiscool posted: »

    So I was going to wait for more people to join, but I'm bored. The resting place part 1 Jeff Niel So I was invited to a Party at th

  • So... Here's part 2 :D

    The resting place part 2

    Melissa Johnson: Stay there. I'm gonna go check it out.

    Then she walks over to the door which was slightly open.

    Melissa: This is the police. Come out with yo-

    Then she opens the door and a huge rock comes down on her head and crushes her skull. Half of the guests stare, and the other half start screaming. Patrick starts crying.

    Philip: ...Holy SHIT...

    Quinn: Who put the rock there?

    Elvira: And who fired the gun?

    Steven lowered his rifle and goes into the room. Philip and Jeff follow. They walk into an empty room. There were no bullet holes and no gun.

    Philip: ...Is this paranormal activity or what?

    Steven: No. Ghosts don't exist.

    Philip: Well, I happen to believe in ghostbusters.

    Then Jeff notices a crack in the wall. He walked toward it. He opens it up and see's a gun and a string attached to a timer.

    Jeff: GUUUUUUYS?

    Philip: What?

    Then they walk over and see the gun

    Steven: What happened?

    Jeff: Soooo, I guess the killer- 'Cause we all know that's the reason, cause no one accidentally puts a huge rock on a door and hides a gun.

    Philip: Or do they?

    Jeff: No.

    Then Philip get's the gun and looks at the ammo.

    Philip: It's full of blanks.

    Jeff: So, the killer probably loaded it with blanks to guarantee that The 1 of the 2 authority figures- Steven and Melissa- go to it and one of them are eliminated.

    Steven: Now what?

    Jeff: Get the hell out of here or Investigate further

    Who do you think is the killer, who do think will die next?

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