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  • [Let him speak]

    It's not always the best thing to ask questions later.

    mr.quality posted: »

    Part 16 The landing wasn't to bad and soon everyone was out on the road. Sora- just great. Dan- what? Sora- even if we do get fu

  • Let him speak

    Because yolo

    NoHopeLeft posted: »

    [Let him speak] It's not always the best thing to ask questions later.

  • Viva el yolo!

    finlander posted: »

    Let him speak Because yolo

  • Part 17

    [Let him talk]

    Uriel- Eva, don't shoot. He's not armed.

    Eva- what? Are you serious?

    ???- what are you doing here? The survivors are lodged at the church.

    Dan- what do you mean? Is this some sort of trap or something?

    ???- no! Heavens no. We except all survivors. So, what are you doing here?

    Zack- our plane ran out of fuel. We were headed to North Dakota.

    ???- ah, so your one of them.

    Uriel- one of who?

    ???- you haven't hear? Rumor has it the military has a camp up there.

    Sora- really? I thought that was fake.

    ???- like I said, its only a rumor. But a lot of people have passed through here on their way there.

    Eva- sounds like we've found a destination.

    Dan- yeah, but we aren't traveling anywhere in this dark.

    ???- oh, no problem you can stay at the church with us if you want. Father Jordan is always glad to meet new people. Even if they don't stay long.

    Zack- yeah, we should stay the night at the church.

    A mutual agreement fell upon the group and they decided to go to the church.

    Dan- OK let's go then.

    ???- great, it up the road.

    Everyone begins to walk up the road.

    ???- so what are your names?

    Zack- I'm Zack, this is Dan, sora, Eva, hopeless, and Uriel.

    ???- and the baby?

    Uriel- that's hoppas, my brother. What's your name?

    ???- I'm Zayne, we have a few more in the church.

    Uriel- how far is it?

    Zayne- its right here.

    A building comes into view on the right side of the road. Zayne walks to the door and opens it.

    Zayne- hey guys, I found some new people.

    ???- why did you bring them here?

    Zayne- because Father Jordon told us to welcome all survivors jack.

    Jack- doesn't mean I have to like them.

    Jack walks off. Zayne turns to Uriel.

    Zayne- ignore him. Make yourself at home. And if you want to talk, I'm over there with my family. Father Jordon is in the back, he might want to talk with you.

    Choice

    [Talk with zayne]

    [Talk to jack]

    [Talk to Father Jordon]

  • [Talk to Father Jordon]

    mr.quality posted: »

    Part 17 [Let him talk] Uriel- Eva, don't shoot. He's not armed. Eva- what? Are you serious? ???- what are you doing here? The su

  • [Talk to Zayne]

    mr.quality posted: »

    Part 17 [Let him talk] Uriel- Eva, don't shoot. He's not armed. Eva- what? Are you serious? ???- what are you doing here? The su

  • Part 18

    [Talk to father Jordon] I voted on this one.

    Uriel- I think I'm going to go talk to that preacher guy.

    Zayne- OK, he probably has some work to do.

    Zayne walks off and Uriel heads towards the back of the church where zayne said Jordon would be. Uriel finds a door and opens it, its a small office and a man is inside.

    Uriel- excuse me, are you father Jordon?

    Father- yes, that would be me. And you are?

    Uriel- my name is Uriel, and this is hoppas.

    Father- great! Its good to see new faces.

    Uriel- thank you for having us.

    Father- oh, no problem. We have enough supplies for any Wonderer who stumbles in here.

    Uriel- thanks? Um, zayne said something about you had some work that needed to be done?

    Father- oh, why yes I do. You see, we have all the supplies we need but our well is broken and if we don't fix it we will eventually run out.

    Uriel- I could take a look at it. It can't be that broken.

    Father- oh, thank you. Follow me its this way.

    Uriel follows father Jordon through the church and out the front door. They move along the perimeter of the church and into a small field behind the church. Uriel sees a well, its in good condition.

    Uriel- is that the well? It looks fine.

    Father- yes, that's the well. And trust me there's something wrong.

    Uriel moves closer to the well and inspects it for any problems. Eventually he gets fed up because he isn't finding anything and turns to face father Jordon. Father Jordon has a pistol aimed at Uriel's head.

    Uriel- what are you doing?

    Father- I'm saving you.

    Uriel- just put the gun down.

    Father- that's not what the Lord wants.

    Uriel- what dose the Lord want?

    Father- he wants me to save you!

    Uriel- this isn't how to do it!

    Father- its how the Lord told me to.

    Uriel- what about the others? Their going to hear the gunshot.

    Father- no they won't. The Lord blessed me with a silencer.

    Uriel- what about Hoppas?

    Father- it will be OK...

    Uriel- you little fucker!

    Father- watch your language!

    Uriel- Fuck you.

    Father- well that's rude.

    Father Jordon fires two shots. One goes straight through Uriel's head and the other...

    Father- what a waste.

    Father Jordon walks over and looks at the body's.

    Father- I wonder what would have become of the infant. Hoppas was his name?

    Meanwhile

    Sora and the rest are sitting around talking with zayne and his family when the front door fly's open and father Jordon runs in. He has a look of shock on his face.

    Sora- what happened? Where's Uriel and hoppas?

    Father- the-the bandits, they came out of the woods and started shooting. They killed Uriel and the child. I escaped.

    End part

  • Oh damn. Awesome chapter! D:

    mr.quality posted: »

    Part 18 [Talk to father Jordon] I voted on this one. Uriel- I think I'm going to go talk to that preacher guy. Zayne- OK, he probab

  • There's more to come... I has ideas...

    NoHopeLeft posted: »

    Oh damn. Awesome chapter!

  • edited November 2014

    This was really good! That fucking priest though....

    mr.quality posted: »

    Part 18 [Talk to father Jordon] I voted on this one. Uriel- I think I'm going to go talk to that preacher guy. Zayne- OK, he probab

  • Hehe, you can thank supersagig for that one.

    finlander posted: »

    This was really good! That fucking priest though....

  • edited November 2014

    We shouldn´t talk with the damn father ¬¬

    mr.quality posted: »

    Part 18 [Talk to father Jordon] I voted on this one. Uriel- I think I'm going to go talk to that preacher guy. Zayne- OK, he probab

  • Lol, it was your character. XD

    supersagig posted: »

    We shouldn´t talk with the damn father ¬¬

  • Damn you Hope =(

    mr.quality posted: »

    Lol, it was your character. XD

  • Who killed another of my characters XD

    I will pray that Jordon just hid Hoppas

    mr.quality posted: »

    Lol, it was your character. XD

  • Well it was implied that he shot both of them

    supersagig posted: »

    Who killed another of my characters XD I will pray that Jordon just hid Hoppas

  • He will get worse than Troy

    mr.quality posted: »

    Well it was implied that he shot both of them

  • He'll kill more people, that's for sure...

    supersagig posted: »

    He will get worse than Troy

  • Please don´t kill Sora or Bianca´s family , kill Hopeless xd

    mr.quality posted: »

    He'll kill more people, that's for sure...

  • kill Hopeless

    D:

    supersagig posted: »

    Please don´t kill Sora or Bianca´s family , kill Hopeless xd

  • You make Uriel end up dead , so i will have a sweet revenge (joking)

    NoHopeLeft posted: »

    kill Hopeless

  • I don't know who I'll kill until I kill them...

    supersagig posted: »

    Please don´t kill Sora or Bianca´s family , kill Hopeless xd

  • Part 19

    Father- the-the bandits, they came out of the woods and started shooting. They killed Uriel and the child. I escaped.

    Sora- what? No. They couldn't just be? No.

    Zack- Sora, you know as well as I that we can't be losing our heads right now.

    Dan- he's right. Those bandits are still out in the woods. We need to find them. Make sure they don't do it again.

    Zayne- its not safe to go tromping around in the woods during night. Especially since there's bandits.

    Zack- OK, we'll wait until morning. Then we head out.

    Dan- fine. Settle in. I'll take first watch.

    MORNING

    everyone has gathered near the doorway.

    Dan- OK, everyone got the plan?

    Susan- yeah, we got it.

    Dan- OK, let's head out.

    Father- wait. I'm not very good on my own. Maybe someone should come with me?

    Sora- I'll go with you.

    Bianca- what about me?

    Zayne- stay with me.

    Hopeless- better get going, were burning daylight.

    Everyone leaves the building and goes in different directions. Sora would head south with father Jordon to scout out the woods.

    Sora- so what's your story?

    Father- I was the preacher here at the church. When it all happened I was at the church. I expected SK e of the residents to show up but they never did. But slowly, new people began coming. They were all headed to North Dakota, to a military safe zone. Zayne and his family are the only ones who's stayed a long time. And jack said he was going to leave tomorrow, of course that was a week ago. What about you?

    Sora- I'm military. I was with my squad, we found a plane and flew it to an air field. Then we ran into the others... People died and we ended up here. I'm the only one left of my squad.

    Father- I'm sorry to hear that.

    By now sora and father Jordon we in the woods.

    Father- what's that over there?

    Sora- I don't know. I'm going to go check it out.

    Father-...

    Sora- did you hear me?

    Sora turns to face father Jordon. He's coming at her with a knife. Sora grabs his wrist but he knocks her to the ground. Father then trys to push the knife into her chest but sora holds the knife back.

    Sora- stop! Why are you doing this?

    Father- the lord told me to! Its what he wants!

    Sora- why? It doesn't have to be like this!

    Father- yes it dose!

    Zack- hey guys, we found something you might want to... Holy shit!

    Father spins around to see Zack standing there in shock. Zack turns to run but father throws a knife that imbeds itself into his back. Father then turns towards where sora was but she isn't there anymore. Something hits him in his head and he falls to the ground. Sora stands behind him holding a police baton. She runs over to Zack.

    Sora- oh God. Why? You- you'll be OK.

    Zack- I'm... Not that... Stupid.

    Sora- I can help you.

    Zack- there's... Only one... Thing you... Can do... To help me.

    Sora- no. You'll be OK.

    Zack-...

    Sora- Zack?

    Zack-...

    Sora pulls out her pistol.

    Sora- I'm sorry.

    bang

    A gunshot goes off. Sora stares at her gun. She didn't shoot.

    Father- that was an awfully kind thing for you to do.

    Sora- Fuck!

    Sora takes off running into the woods back towards the church. She can still hear father behind her.

    Father- you can't run forever!

    Sora keeps running until she's at the church. Everyone is gathered outside.

    Dan- where were you? We sent Zack to get you.

    Sora- its father! Father is the killer! He shot Zack. He's the one that killed Uriel and hoppas!

    Father Jordan comes running out of the woods but stops when he sees all the people.

    Father- oh shi...

    Father pulls out his pistol. Dan and the others aim at father.

    Father- I don't want to shot you.

    [Choice]

    [Shot father Jordon]

    [Try to get him to put the gun down]

  • [Shot father Jordon]
    Just to get Sora safe :P

    Also
    [Make Hopeless get a heart attack and die] (Joking)

    mr.quality posted: »

    Part 19 Father- the-the bandits, they came out of the woods and started shooting. They killed Uriel and the child. I escaped. Sora- wh

  • [Shoot father Jordon]

    Awesome chapter!

    mr.quality posted: »

    Part 19 Father- the-the bandits, they came out of the woods and started shooting. They killed Uriel and the child. I escaped. Sora- wh

  • I was joking XD , but do it if that is what you really want :p

    mr.quality posted: »

    Well, OK then. I'll make a mental note. It seems like everyone is telling me to kill hopeless

  • -Whispers- Kill him... :P

    mr.quality posted: »

    Well, OK then. I'll make a mental note. It seems like everyone is telling me to kill hopeless

  • Well, OK then. I'll make a mental note. It seems like everyone is telling me to kill hopeless

    supersagig posted: »

    [Shot father Jordon] Just to get Sora safe :P Also [Make Hopeless get a heart attack and die] (Joking)

  • Thanks!

    NoHopeLeft posted: »

    [Shoot father Jordon] Awesome chapter!

  • 10/10! :D

    (Let's hope this one stays...)

    mr.quality posted: »

    Your post disappeared. But yeah. Hopeless- hey guys... Hopeless falls to the floor grasping her heart. XD

  • Your post disappeared. But yeah.

    Hopeless- hey guys...

    Hopeless falls to the floor grasping her heart.

    XD

    supersagig posted: »

    [Shot father Jordon] Just to get Sora safe :P Also [Make Hopeless get a heart attack and die] (Joking)

  • Everyones posts are disappearing so I'm going to let my tablet cool off for the rest of the night. Peace!

  • name Seth Green

    age 10

    appearance black short heddle hair , blue eyes , caucasian , 4,7 feet tall

    personality Calm , Shy , Happy

    weapons Anything

    other qualitys run

    background He is mude and orphan

    occupation Student

    name Kyle "Blue" Miles

    age 16

    appearance blue dyed short heddle hair , blue eyes , african-american , 4,8 feet tall

    personality Agressive , Annoying , Mean , Sarcastic

    weapons a rifle

    other qualitys being an asshole

    background Not much

    occupation Student

    name Erica Brown

    age 17

    appearance blonde long curly hair , blue eyes , caucasian , 5,1 feet tall

    personality Evil , Crazy , Mean , Rude

    weapons a crowbar

    other qualitys kill anything

    background She´s been crazy even before the ZA started. She made a community with the other orphan kids

    occupation Student

    name Veronica Redborn

    age 6

    appearance brown long curly hair , green eyes , caucasian , 4,1 feet tall

    personality Nervous , Shy , Cute

    weapons nothing

    other qualitys run

    background .......

    occupation Student

    name Irma Brown

    age 15

    appearance black long heddle hair , brown eyes , caucasian , 4.5 feet tall

    personality Helpful , Caring , Dumb

    weapons a 9mm gun

    other qualitys dance

    background She is Erica´s sister

    occupation Student

    name Helen Williams

    age 13

    appearance red short heddle hair , green eyes , caucasian , 4,3 feet tall

    personality Smart , Lonely , Mean

    weapons hunt knife

    other qualitys being alone

    background Nothing

    occupation Student

    name Brooke Moore

    age 17

    appearance black short heddle hair , brown eyes , african-american , 5,2 feet tall

    personality Smart , Helpless , Talkative

    weapons a bat

    other qualitys Cook

    background She´s pregnant because Kyle raped her

    occupation Student

    All these are member of a community that Erica made. They only accept children and they kill you if you aren´t one :P

  • OK thanks. Almost all of them have colors in their names. Lol.

    And in Seth's background it says: mude and orphan. What is mude?

    supersagig posted: »

    name Seth Green age 10 appearance black short heddle hair , blue eyes , caucasian , 4,7 feet tall personality Calm , Shy , Happy

  • mute :P

    mr.quality posted: »

    OK thanks. Almost all of them have colors in their names. Lol. And in Seth's background it says: mude and orphan. What is mude?

  • OK. Gottya

    supersagig posted: »

    mute :P

  • Part whatever this is.

    [Shoot father Jordon]

    Father- we can be civil about this. Killing me isn't what God wants.

    Hopeless- civil my ass.

    Hopeless shoots but her shot is high and to the left. Father returns fire but doesn't seem to hit anything. Sora can hear the bullets whizzing past her head. Dan and the others return fire and sora joins in. Father falls to his knees with multiple bullet wounds in him.

    Father- didn't... Think... You would.

    Father quickly lifts his gun and fires one more time. It skins Dan's shoulder and sora shoots father in the head.

    Sora- damn. That was loud. Walkers are gonna roll this place over. We need to move.

    Dan- OK. OK. Let's go. We should find a car.

    Hopeless- help... Me...

    Sora looks around for hopeless and finds her laying on the ground grasping her chest.

    Sora- holy shit! What happened?

    Hopeless- that... Preacher... Has... Good aim...

    Sora- OK, let me look at it.

    Hopeless moves her hands so sora can see the wound. Sora steps back in shock.

    Hopeless- what... Is it... That... Bad?

    Sora- no, you'll be fine... I'm sure...

    Hopeless- bull...shit.

    Sora looks at the pool of blood building around hopeless. Sora knew there was no hope for her. Sora just stands staring.

    Hopeless- I... Guess we... All know... What... Comes next.

    Hopeless reaches for her gun but it fell just out of reach.

    Hopeless- a... Little help?

    Dan walks over to hopeless.

    Dan- you guys should go. I'll be there in a second.

    Zayne- are you sure? You don't have to do this.

    Dan- just go!

    Zayne- OK, come on let's go.

    Everyone begins to walk down the churches driveway and onto the road.

    Susan- so, where do we go from here?

    Jack- follow me. I found a swat van down this road. We can drive that. Its safe enough.

    Bang

    A sharp gunshot echo's In the valley. Sora falls to her knees and begins to cry.

    now

    Zayne- man, I'm sorry about what happened.

    Dan- just shut up about it.

    Zayne- I just want to-

    Dan- fucking shut up!

    Zayne- sorry.

    Sora was paying attention to the road ahead. She didn't know where she was driving to or why. All she knew is the road went this way and it would be safer than what it was back their. Light was beginning to fade but the memory's were fresh in her mind. 'Just keep going' thats what York always said. York, she really missed him. "Damnit! Quit thinking about that.'' She told herself. She needed to focus on the road. An intersection came into view, with some really interesting places on it. Jack was sitting shotgun next to sora, the rest were in the back of the van.

    Jack- so, where are we headed?

    [I-90] west ward.

    [I-29] northbound, to North Dakota.

    ( note for purposes of this story, were on the eastern part of South Dakota)

  • edited December 2014

    [I-29] northbound, to North Dakota. To Rushmore :P

    Amazing Chapter!!!!

    mr.quality posted: »

    Part whatever this is. [Shoot father Jordon] Father- we can be civil about this. Killing me isn't what God wants. Hopeless- civil m

  • [I-90] west ward.

    Cool chapter. :P

    mr.quality posted: »

    Part whatever this is. [Shoot father Jordon] Father- we can be civil about this. Killing me isn't what God wants. Hopeless- civil m

  • [I-29] Northbound, north dakota

    Great work man, seems like people got what they wanted, Hopeless in dead xd

    mr.quality posted: »

    Part whatever this is. [Shoot father Jordon] Father- we can be civil about this. Killing me isn't what God wants. Hopeless- civil m

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